Finding Me
contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Debra,
These few words tell of a woman rediscovering herself after getting lost in all her new titles and duties as wife and mother. This seems to happen a lot.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing third in the contest,
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Hi Debra,
These few words tell of a woman rediscovering herself after getting lost in all her new titles and duties as wife and mother. This seems to happen a lot.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing third in the contest,
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Joan, for your kind feedback and message of congratulations :)
Best wishes, Debra
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You're welcome on both accounts, Debra.
Joan
Comment from pome lover
Well, Miss Debra,
That is very thought provoking. It sounds a bit to me, like a "smothered mother" who might need a vacation with friends.
I don't mean to be presumptive - which I guess I am being, but it was my reaction after reading your really well done poem.
Whether is is or not what you meant, I do think sometimes moms need to take a break with friends (not fam) and though you'd most probably still worry about things at home, a fun, laughing time-out might be a needed reprieve.
If I'm out of line, I apologize. I have gotten to the age where I sometimes says things I shouldn't. I'm just thinking of you.
I do think your poem is excellent, whatever the reason. And I wish you the best in the contest, and in finding your cute self.
Katharine
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Well, Miss Debra,
That is very thought provoking. It sounds a bit to me, like a "smothered mother" who might need a vacation with friends.
I don't mean to be presumptive - which I guess I am being, but it was my reaction after reading your really well done poem.
Whether is is or not what you meant, I do think sometimes moms need to take a break with friends (not fam) and though you'd most probably still worry about things at home, a fun, laughing time-out might be a needed reprieve.
If I'm out of line, I apologize. I have gotten to the age where I sometimes says things I shouldn't. I'm just thinking of you.
I do think your poem is excellent, whatever the reason. And I wish you the best in the contest, and in finding your cute self.
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Katharine, for your kind feedback and generous feedback!
I appreciate your thoughts. You're very perceptive - no need for apologies whatsoever x
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I dislike commenting on short pieces when required to comment with more words than the composition but I Loved This. ð???
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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I dislike commenting on short pieces when required to comment with more words than the composition but I Loved This. ð???
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much, Tom :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from patcelaw
We are right where we left her selves. Enjoyed your pool very much I wish you the very best in the contest. Have a blessed evening and a God continue to use you in your writing. Patricia
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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We are right where we left her selves. Enjoyed your pool very much I wish you the very best in the contest. Have a blessed evening and a God continue to use you in your writing. Patricia
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you for your kind feedback, Patricia :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
Very nice! And don't worry. You might feel buried, neglected, lost. But you aren't. I see you. And I know your family sees you, too. Sometimes we feel used, taken for granted perhaps. But you are a good mother, wife, pet owner, teacher, poet, and loved by God and all your family and friends.
My favorite words in your 20-syllable poem,
" 'neath layers of
motherhood and matrimony"
Take time to breathe. Take time for you!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Hi Debra,
Very nice! And don't worry. You might feel buried, neglected, lost. But you aren't. I see you. And I know your family sees you, too. Sometimes we feel used, taken for granted perhaps. But you are a good mother, wife, pet owner, teacher, poet, and loved by God and all your family and friends.
My favorite words in your 20-syllable poem,
" 'neath layers of
motherhood and matrimony"
Take time to breathe. Take time for you!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Kimbob, for your kind words of encouragement and care. I appreciate you x
Comment from Mark D. R.
Debra,
Great imagery to go with your biography. As a big fan of alliteration, your second line really fits my preference.
I will suggest a small edit: "right where I want to be."
Mark
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Debra,
Great imagery to go with your biography. As a big fan of alliteration, your second line really fits my preference.
I will suggest a small edit: "right where I want to be."
Mark
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you for your kind feedback, Mark :)
Best wishes, Dera
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Debra.
-You have used your 20 syllables well with a good topic.
-A good opening line and effective imagery and
alliteration in the second line that shows
the roles you have fulfilled.
-I like your closing line very much because
it shows you are happy with who you are.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Debra.
-You have used your 20 syllables well with a good topic.
-A good opening line and effective imagery and
alliteration in the second line that shows
the roles you have fulfilled.
-I like your closing line very much because
it shows you are happy with who you are.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Hello Pam :)
Thank you so much for your great feedback.
I always appreciated your thorough and thoughtful breakdown.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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You are very welcome, Debra.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
And I'm sure you are the best mother and wife your family could wish for, Debra. I love this little poem, especially that last line, right where you left yourself, that is a true statement of all you are, my friend. Very well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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And I'm sure you are the best mother and wife your family could wish for, Debra. I love this little poem, especially that last line, right where you left yourself, that is a true statement of all you are, my friend. Very well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Aw, thank you, Sandra :) I do my best!
Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Hope you are continuing to recover xx
Comment from lyenochka
I know what you mean. You're so busy being wife and mother and looking after the needs and interests of others that it's hard to remember your own identity. But you are still you - and all these years of giving develops your special uniqueness even more. Beautifully said!
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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I know what you mean. You're so busy being wife and mother and looking after the needs and interests of others that it's hard to remember your own identity. But you are still you - and all these years of giving develops your special uniqueness even more. Beautifully said!
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Helen :)
I've reached a point where I need to try and find me again, as much as I love Shaun and the kids!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Debra,
Excellent entry for the 20 Syllable Poem contest. I love the words imagery and beautiful presentation. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good luck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Hello, Debra,
Excellent entry for the 20 Syllable Poem contest. I love the words imagery and beautiful presentation. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good luck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy :)
Best wishes as always, Debra