Tanka Collection
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
searched backwards to find this tanka poem... I knew I read it, but my own chains have held me captive, not allowing me to revisit until now.
So, yes, I relate to this poem like a kindred soul. The thoughts and memories flashing in full colour. When one goes through life as a bit of a loner, they tend to attract the same... what my auntie named... 'lame ducks' to their flock, and for me this is so true. I found more comfort in knowing and associating with these folk... we were all damaged goods and that was enough. Some you help, some can't be, some don't want to be... and really, even one's desire to give your all to save a soul is tainted because we ourselves are damaged. Maybe our true desire belongs in trying to earn salvation through empathy?
No matter the reason, life is life and the journey is about growth. We all walk the path we choose to follow, it may not seem to be that way through the darkness that consumes, but even there I have found the greatest value.
One thing's for sure, no matter what path, the road converges and leads us all to the same destiny.
Powerful in every sense of the word. It sat hard against my heart and soul!
With our thoughts we create...
reasons why.
Warm regards,
James.
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Hi MariVal,
searched backwards to find this tanka poem... I knew I read it, but my own chains have held me captive, not allowing me to revisit until now.
So, yes, I relate to this poem like a kindred soul. The thoughts and memories flashing in full colour. When one goes through life as a bit of a loner, they tend to attract the same... what my auntie named... 'lame ducks' to their flock, and for me this is so true. I found more comfort in knowing and associating with these folk... we were all damaged goods and that was enough. Some you help, some can't be, some don't want to be... and really, even one's desire to give your all to save a soul is tainted because we ourselves are damaged. Maybe our true desire belongs in trying to earn salvation through empathy?
No matter the reason, life is life and the journey is about growth. We all walk the path we choose to follow, it may not seem to be that way through the darkness that consumes, but even there I have found the greatest value.
One thing's for sure, no matter what path, the road converges and leads us all to the same destiny.
Powerful in every sense of the word. It sat hard against my heart and soul!
With our thoughts we create...
reasons why.
Warm regards,
James.
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Wow, you continue to amaze me with your insightful reviews.... it's like you get into my mind and know exactly what I was feeling when I wrote it. As my kindred spirit, you know how it feels when you want to fix someone you love or care about. The only person we can improve is ourselves. I agree with you, our genuine desire belongs in trying to save ourselves in the process. Does it work? It obviously hasn't worked for me, but I am trying.
Have an awesome evening or morning :)
Gypsy hugs xoxox
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I do believe that almost all people are drug down by our past chains. I can't believe anybody has escaped this. I think it's how we handle those chains that's the key. Unfortunately, I think they have a habit of reappearing every so often. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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I do believe that almost all people are drug down by our past chains. I can't believe anybody has escaped this. I think it's how we handle those chains that's the key. Unfortunately, I think they have a habit of reappearing every so often. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thank you, Barbara, I appreciate your exceptional review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That is the difficult thing about people being attracted to someone with a similar pain and wanting to help heal. But instead people end up increasing each other's problems in codependency. Well expressed in your tanka!
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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That is the difficult thing about people being attracted to someone with a similar pain and wanting to help heal. But instead people end up increasing each other's problems in codependency. Well expressed in your tanka!
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thank you, big sister, yes, you got it. I appreciate your review and insightful feedback.
Love,
Marival ❤️
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----ah, those pesky chains of of the past. Call me Jacob Marley---my chains of the past threaten to hang me. I'm the world's guiltiest guy
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----ah, those pesky chains of of the past. Call me Jacob Marley---my chains of the past threaten to hang me. I'm the world's guiltiest guy
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
The picture showed a beautiful young lady that was chained to a block, Gypsy. Your words were strong. I read your narrative notes and she was abducted by a pack of demons and treated as a slave. Her unwavering faith didn't save her. She died as a slave. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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The picture showed a beautiful young lady that was chained to a block, Gypsy. Your words were strong. I read your narrative notes and she was abducted by a pack of demons and treated as a slave. Her unwavering faith didn't save her. She died as a slave. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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The information at the bottom is about the painting, it's not related to the poem. I just liked the way it looks.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a darker poem. The writer holding out hope that the pain of past mistakes will somehow be eased by falling for someone who had their own issues. This happens in rehab sometimes. You share the addiction and feel compelled to share the experience. Usually not a stellar outcome. Probably not our intended meaning but it's where my head went. Gretchen
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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This was a darker poem. The writer holding out hope that the pain of past mistakes will somehow be eased by falling for someone who had their own issues. This happens in rehab sometimes. You share the addiction and feel compelled to share the experience. Usually not a stellar outcome. Probably not our intended meaning but it's where my head went. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Gretchen. Yes, tanka can be very dark at times. They are poems of strong emotions. It was created in the Japanese Imperial Court where lovers wrote tanka for each other after a night of love making. Later on it has developed into all kinds of emotions in relationships. If you are interested to check it out,
I recommend this online book, it's free. The Ink Dark Moon Tanka is my favorite Japanese poetic form.
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh this is so cool and mysterious! so many directions this could go! love it!
thank you for sharing!!
shelley :)
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reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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ooh this is so cool and mysterious! so many directions this could go! love it!
thank you for sharing!!
shelley :)
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Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Shelley. I appreciate your positive review and feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, we can't help others because we are ourselves tied and bound up in our own troubles, this is very insightful Gypsy, the thought of these things is convicting, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Oh yes indeed, we can't help others because we are ourselves tied and bound up in our own troubles, this is very insightful Gypsy, the thought of these things is convicting, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate your positive review and feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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A pleasure
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds so awful and there are situations in real life where women are imprisoned and under the command of others and cannot escape, a poignant and chilling write, mythical but with an element of truth, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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This sounds so awful and there are situations in real life where women are imprisoned and under the command of others and cannot escape, a poignant and chilling write, mythical but with an element of truth, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Dolly. I appreciate your positive review and feedback.
Gypsy hugs