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Comment from Terry Broxson
Wendy, a very well-written story for this contest, good luck. I think that is a lot of truth in this fiction story. I certainly have some first-hand experience, although we never had children. But I wouldn't have wanted children like Tom and Ed. Good job. Terry.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Wendy, a very well-written story for this contest, good luck. I think that is a lot of truth in this fiction story. I certainly have some first-hand experience, although we never had children. But I wouldn't have wanted children like Tom and Ed. Good job. Terry.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much Terry. The first part is basically a true story but he is still alive and very lonely. The second part (the death) is also a true story unfortunately, but no one knows if he was just lonely or had dementia or both or neither. Thanks again for the review.
Wendy
Comment from Sarah Tummey
I found this relatable, even though I'm not grieving a spouse. I have lots of photos in my flat of friends who now live too far away to visit regularly. I display the photos because they mean a lot to me and I want people to know what they look like.
It's a very moving piece. It reminds us to prioritise what's important, even in the busy times. Thanks for sharing it, Wendy.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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I found this relatable, even though I'm not grieving a spouse. I have lots of photos in my flat of friends who now live too far away to visit regularly. I display the photos because they mean a lot to me and I want people to know what they look like.
It's a very moving piece. It reminds us to prioritise what's important, even in the busy times. Thanks for sharing it, Wendy.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, Sarah. Your words plus the six stars mean a great deal to me. The story is fiction but is based on two true situations. The first person is still alive but very lonely and has got to the point of selling his home. His daughters didn?t want any mementos. Very sad. Thanks again.
Wendy
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Wendy,
well you know how to pull on the heartstrings, now don't you!
The sad, yet familiar tale, told in so many different ways and with a variety of different circumstances... but in the end, the very same result.
The hole left by empty-lonely lives.
Beautifully conveyed story Wendy. Joy in its conveyance, yet an empty feeling creeps over me as I ponder the many images you crafted so vividly in description that sit like fog in the valley's of my mind.
Truly enjoyed the read. All the very best in this contest dear friend.
I started a story for this contest, but covid hazed my view and stalled my progress. Ah well, may the spoils land where they may...smile(((((((.
With our thoughts we create...
an empty void.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Hi Wendy,
well you know how to pull on the heartstrings, now don't you!
The sad, yet familiar tale, told in so many different ways and with a variety of different circumstances... but in the end, the very same result.
The hole left by empty-lonely lives.
Beautifully conveyed story Wendy. Joy in its conveyance, yet an empty feeling creeps over me as I ponder the many images you crafted so vividly in description that sit like fog in the valley's of my mind.
Truly enjoyed the read. All the very best in this contest dear friend.
I started a story for this contest, but covid hazed my view and stalled my progress. Ah well, may the spoils land where they may...smile(((((((.
With our thoughts we create...
an empty void.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much James. I certainly value the gift of six stars! Much appreciated, along with your thoughtful and insightful words. The sad truth is that this story resonates with many, because although it is fiction it is based on truth and many gave experienced such loneliness. Thank you again.
Wendy
Comment from Lisasview
I just can not stop crying...
Remembering the death of my husbands parents and then mine. How we were connected but maybe just not enough...
Friends do drop off... they were friends when alive but have absolutely no idea how to act when one is gone...
I wish you had gone into more detail about his death... Because your beginning was very descriptive etc... and, just did not ring true months later....
Also, very true that family comes after death and discards everything...
Lisa, new to this site
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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I just can not stop crying...
Remembering the death of my husbands parents and then mine. How we were connected but maybe just not enough...
Friends do drop off... they were friends when alive but have absolutely no idea how to act when one is gone...
I wish you had gone into more detail about his death... Because your beginning was very descriptive etc... and, just did not ring true months later....
Also, very true that family comes after death and discards everything...
Lisa, new to this site
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thank you for reviewing and I am sorry if this story brought up difficult times and memories. I am sure nothing was your fault. There was not much known about the actual when or why of his death. It seems he just walked away. My story is actually a composite of two people. The lonely man is still alive, and he retired early to care for his wife. He?s younger than me - still lonely as his family are far away. The second part concerns the father of a friend, and he just wandered away, caught a train and was found months later in bushland. He too was on his own and probably very lonely too, but may have suffered from dementia. Thanks again.
Wendy
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! You have created a really sad story that I'm afraid is reflective of too many who are left alone. It is so much better if one has something they really enjoy to keep life interesting after their mate is gone. I'm glad I outlived my husband because he was quiet and shy and his might have been like this except I believe the children would have been there for him. You story is very thought provoking.
Beth
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Wow! You have created a really sad story that I'm afraid is reflective of too many who are left alone. It is so much better if one has something they really enjoy to keep life interesting after their mate is gone. I'm glad I outlived my husband because he was quiet and shy and his might have been like this except I believe the children would have been there for him. You story is very thought provoking.
Beth
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thank you Beth. Your review is thoughtful and insightful. It is fiction but the first part is based on a relative who was working until 59 when he stopped to care for his wife who died a couple of years later. He didn?t have time for hobbies, and they did absolutely everything together before she got sick. But he is still alive and gradually getting on with his life. I think this situation represents the loneliness of many who lose a partner, and it is important to develop some individual interests. Thanks so much for reviewing.
Wendy
Comment from w.j.debi
Whoa, what a sad story. Yes, people get so caught up in their busy schedules, doing things, that they forget the importance of family, especially older members who contributed so much and now just need a little attention to validate they are important. So sad that the photos and cards and quilts, etc. Meant so little to Ed and Tom. They missed the point of life.
Best of luck in the contest with this well written story.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Whoa, what a sad story. Yes, people get so caught up in their busy schedules, doing things, that they forget the importance of family, especially older members who contributed so much and now just need a little attention to validate they are important. So sad that the photos and cards and quilts, etc. Meant so little to Ed and Tom. They missed the point of life.
Best of luck in the contest with this well written story.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much. I greatly appreciate your review, and the gift of six stars. That means a lot to me, as do your thoughtful words and good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
What a sad, sad story . . . and far too true of far too many. Good luck in the contest. You told it well. I'm so thankful for our two children's love and loyalty. This reminds me of how blessed we are.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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What a sad, sad story . . . and far too true of far too many. Good luck in the contest. You told it well. I'm so thankful for our two children's love and loyalty. This reminds me of how blessed we are.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much Verna. What a thoughtful review. You are right - this sort of thing happens far too often (especially the first part with ongoing loneliness). I am glad you are surrounded by love and care.
Wendy
Comment from Spitfire
Another winner, I say. Excellent yet frightening opening. Three well thought-out examples of how her memory still filled every room. The speaker is angry about his sons and old friends who never seemed to have time to visit or phone. When the old man disappears, the detective suspects he got lost. "Died from a broken heart" rings a bell as my mother suspected that's what happened to her mother who could no longer live by herself and had to give up her mobile home in Florida and move to New York so my mom could take care of her. It broke her heart to leave the warm weather and suffer the cold she hated. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Another winner, I say. Excellent yet frightening opening. Three well thought-out examples of how her memory still filled every room. The speaker is angry about his sons and old friends who never seemed to have time to visit or phone. When the old man disappears, the detective suspects he got lost. "Died from a broken heart" rings a bell as my mother suspected that's what happened to her mother who could no longer live by herself and had to give up her mobile home in Florida and move to New York so my mom could take care of her. It broke her heart to leave the warm weather and suffer the cold she hated. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thank you Shari! Also for the wonderful stars and honour of six! I think this story resonated with many of us, who are either experiencing such loneliness or fear experiencing it, of know someone in that situation. Thanks again. Wendy
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very sad story, but it's very well written. It is a shame when one loses their spouse and the children don't seem to care to go and visit with them on a regular basis. I know for myself I was alone pretty much for about 22 years after my husband passed away. Fortunately, now I live with my oldest daughter, and I am treated very well.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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This is a very sad story, but it's very well written. It is a shame when one loses their spouse and the children don't seem to care to go and visit with them on a regular basis. I know for myself I was alone pretty much for about 22 years after my husband passed away. Fortunately, now I live with my oldest daughter, and I am treated very well.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much Patricia. I am glad you now have company and good care. Although my story is fiction, it is based on truth and the first part at least is much more common than people realise. Thank you again.
Wendy
Comment from damommy
Wow! A very moving story. Sadly, this happens to many elderly people. They get lost from their children who are too buy to see about them. I believe it's possible to die from a broken heart.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Wow! A very moving story. Sadly, this happens to many elderly people. They get lost from their children who are too buy to see about them. I believe it's possible to die from a broken heart.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thank you. Yes it does resonate - it?s very close to many people?s experience. Thank you so much for the six stars. Very greatly valued and appreciated.
Wendy