Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "No Accident"A compilation of poems
11 total reviews
Comment from sherrygreywolf
You have written a deeply moving and thought-provoking 5-7-5. It meets all the requirements of the contest and leads the reader to see the crash and the loss felt by the writer. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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You have written a deeply moving and thought-provoking 5-7-5. It meets all the requirements of the contest and leads the reader to see the crash and the loss felt by the writer. Great job.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for your insightful comments. I also appreciate your consideration I hope you're evening is amazing thanks again!
Comment from Eternal Muse
It was powerful. And tragic. Many drunk driver accidents unfortunately end in fatalities and it is always horrifying.
It was very colorful, but your bluish text font was jarring to my eyes. I think, a darker font color would bring up the presentation and more votes. Also, the text size was a bit large, perhaps you would consider bringing it down a couple of notches? Just a suggestion.
I wish you a lot of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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It was powerful. And tragic. Many drunk driver accidents unfortunately end in fatalities and it is always horrifying.
It was very colorful, but your bluish text font was jarring to my eyes. I think, a darker font color would bring up the presentation and more votes. Also, the text size was a bit large, perhaps you would consider bringing it down a couple of notches? Just a suggestion.
I wish you a lot of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you for your kind review and for your suggestions I take them to heart. I appreciate all that you I said and you're time and you're fine ready. I thank you so much again. I hope that your evening is grand!
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line is so very sad
and says it all! There is a strong message in this poem for all adults! Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes! The artwork
is a good example of a tragic accident and as the author's title makes
clear - No Accident! This is an excellent poem - thank you!
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line is so very sad
and says it all! There is a strong message in this poem for all adults! Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes! The artwork
is a good example of a tragic accident and as the author's title makes
clear - No Accident! This is an excellent poem - thank you!
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind and insightful review. I'm very happy to receive it I also thank you for your insight and for your thoughtfulness! I hope that your day is grand and wonderful thanks again!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation is really hard to read. You can fix it easy. Don't use BOLE font. Use a light font color.
Concrete images of the easy to visualize. It's very sad and tragic.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation is really hard to read. You can fix it easy. Don't use BOLE font. Use a light font color.
Concrete images of the easy to visualize. It's very sad and tragic.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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I thank you again for reading and for your kind and insightful review! Your comments and advise are always appreciated by me and yes the font should change for sure!
Thank you again I hope your day is grand!
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, it's irresponsible and selfish, uncaring towards others, and shows that the person has no idea of the value of life. Your words are poignant and meaningful. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Yes, it's irresponsible and selfish, uncaring towards others, and shows that the person has no idea of the value of life. Your words are poignant and meaningful. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you wendy for your kind review and thank you also for your insight and your thoughtful comments are always appreciated by me. For your time and for your kind rating I also appreciate so much. I hope your evening is great thanks again!
Comment from kahpot
Very powerful message for those who drink and drive and for those who have lost because of it, a sad but excellent 5-7-5 poem very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Very powerful message for those who drink and drive and for those who have lost because of it, a sad but excellent 5-7-5 poem very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you for your kind review I'll always appreciate your thoughtful comments! What you're reading for your time that too is appreciated by me. I hope your day is grand and the sun is shining where you're at!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, No Accident, has the proper formatting and rightly accuses those who would drink and drive as people who have weaponized their vehicles................................................
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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This 5-7-5, No Accident, has the proper formatting and rightly accuses those who would drink and drive as people who have weaponized their vehicles................................................
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you bill appreciate i your review and for your comments! Your time too is greatly appreciated and I hope your evening is going well have a good night!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao ,
Yes there is an on going tragedy in my country too.
Every weekend we register deaths due to alcohol, teens and young adults coming home from night clubs or discotheques intoxicated.
Young lives lost and families , left to mourn, destroyed.
PS: the blue metallic print you chose is really harsh on the eye .. I had trouble reading it.
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Ciao ,
Yes there is an on going tragedy in my country too.
Every weekend we register deaths due to alcohol, teens and young adults coming home from night clubs or discotheques intoxicated.
Young lives lost and families , left to mourn, destroyed.
PS: the blue metallic print you chose is really harsh on the eye .. I had trouble reading it.
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Hi thank you so much for responding and offering your insightful and kind comments. I am really sorry that this too is happening where you are. And I hope that people will wake up to the realities of what they do. I thank you kindly for your time especially and I hope that all is well where you are at. Thank you again for your time and for your fine rating. I hope your evening is going great!
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Ciao,
it?s actually 5 minutes to 9.00 in the morning here.
After days of rain , the sun is out and shining 🌞 yeah!
I hope you have a peaceful weekend!
Keep safe ! 🍀
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Thank you and you as well!
Comment from royowen
The death of a child as the result of drink driving is particularly heinous, the crime can be avoided, but it's so common on the roads, along with other misdemeanours, this is beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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The death of a child as the result of drink driving is particularly heinous, the crime can be avoided, but it's so common on the roads, along with other misdemeanours, this is beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you Roy once again for your kind and insightful review. I'm always glad to hear from you as your reviews I always quite thoughtful.
Your comments and insights are always appreciative as well as your time I hope your day is awesome!
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Well done
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This would be particularly good as a poster to warn of these dangers. Without any wasted words, this haiku speaks directly and therefore powerfully of this unforgivable crime. Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
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reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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This would be particularly good as a poster to warn of these dangers. Without any wasted words, this haiku speaks directly and therefore powerfully of this unforgivable crime. Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
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Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 23-May-2023
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Thank you so much Debbie! I appreciate your review as always for your time and effort. I'm glad your day is grand thanks again!
