The Aspen Grove Murders
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "The Aspen Grove Murders #27"A Tommy Thompson Mystery
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Comment from Doc Fin
I really liked the detail, especially in the opening scene. I could imagine the dress, and the reaction to it. The dialogue seemed very natural, even when it was a bit abbreviated.
A few spelling errors jumped out - "their" instead of "there", small things like that. I was confused by the reference to height as it pertained to spending the night in a hospital.
Overall, this feels like a peek at a rich story, but I would like more than a peek. Can you provide a few more details that will help me "feel" the experiences of your characters? What color are the walls in the hospital, and does that color affect the ambience or the mood of the characters? Things like that. I want the inside scoop!
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reply by the author on 22-May-2023
I really liked the detail, especially in the opening scene. I could imagine the dress, and the reaction to it. The dialogue seemed very natural, even when it was a bit abbreviated.
A few spelling errors jumped out - "their" instead of "there", small things like that. I was confused by the reference to height as it pertained to spending the night in a hospital.
Overall, this feels like a peek at a rich story, but I would like more than a peek. Can you provide a few more details that will help me "feel" the experiences of your characters? What color are the walls in the hospital, and does that color affect the ambience or the mood of the characters? Things like that. I want the inside scoop!
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Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Unbelievable! A three star review from someone who's been here five minutes. That's no way to get your footing on FanStory. A three star review is considered an insult. I have muted you from my pages.
Comment from royowen
To find love, or rather love finding us is such a precious commodity, we don't have to be like our parents, the principle is, I want to be a better version of them, and my children to be a better version of me, let them dance on our roof, their floor our ceiling. I am unworthy of God and my wife, by I'm glad they love me. Great example of t reflection, Sally, keep your eyes looking upward. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
To find love, or rather love finding us is such a precious commodity, we don't have to be like our parents, the principle is, I want to be a better version of them, and my children to be a better version of me, let them dance on our roof, their floor our ceiling. I am unworthy of God and my wife, by I'm glad they love me. Great example of t reflection, Sally, keep your eyes looking upward. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Thank you so much, dear Roy! I'm so blessed! Sal XOs
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Amen
Comment from Ben Colder
For God is Love. He that knows God will love. He who does not know God will never love. You opened this with the Word. Well done, Sal. Sending blessings your way.
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
For God is Love. He that knows God will love. He who does not know God will never love. You opened this with the Word. Well done, Sal. Sending blessings your way.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Thank you so much for the awesome review and super stars, my friend. Blessings to you always.
Sal :)) xo
Comment from Teri7
Sally, This is a very beautiful and very well written chapter. You used great descriptive and loving words. It made my heart happy as I read it. Beautiful imagery from the picture! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
Sally, This is a very beautiful and very well written chapter. You used great descriptive and loving words. It made my heart happy as I read it. Beautiful imagery from the picture! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Thank you for the excellent review, Teri dear! Blessings to you always,
Sal XOs
Comment from patcelaw
This is such a beautiful wedding chapter you have presented for us in this book. I enjoyed listening to it very much at one point when Simon talks about not wanting to be like his father I came to admire Simon very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
This is such a beautiful wedding chapter you have presented for us in this book. I enjoyed listening to it very much at one point when Simon talks about not wanting to be like his father I came to admire Simon very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Wow! Aren't you so sweet and generous, my newest fan! I'm so blessed to have you close to me. I'm delighted you've enjoyed the book so far. Blessings to you always, dear Patricia.
Sal XOs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. You did a beautiful job describing their love. It was perfect. I am worried about Fitzgerald Elling. I fear we are not done with him. Until he's dead, he's a danger.
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reply by the author on 27-May-2023
Thank you for sharing this with us. You did a beautiful job describing their love. It was perfect. I am worried about Fitzgerald Elling. I fear we are not done with him. Until he's dead, he's a danger.
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Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Thank you for the lovely review and insightful comments. Both mean so much. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal xoxo's