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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Stars that Are Dying (A)"Poetry from Another Planet
2 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Again, thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
Do God,, when everything. (one comma is enough)
Focus ever more ad I am blinded. (as?)
Dearth brings us even closer. (Death??)
Cry for you died my Jay. (comma after 'died')
Jay you died for those whom. (comma after 'Jay')
Time gor only me. (for??)
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Again, thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
Do God,, when everything. (one comma is enough)
Focus ever more ad I am blinded. (as?)
Dearth brings us even closer. (Death??)
Cry for you died my Jay. (comma after 'died')
Jay you died for those whom. (comma after 'Jay')
Time gor only me. (for??)
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Read it now Barbara and tell me what you think.
I'm working on the new book now.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think death does bring us closer to the reality of life, but it is sad to see life cut short when it is in its prime Ricky and the stars died for you that day, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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I think death does bring us closer to the reality of life, but it is sad to see life cut short when it is in its prime Ricky and the stars died for you that day, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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This was an atrocious grammar mess which I just cleaned up and worthy of a rewrite.
Thank you for your review and I hope you check it again?
Doctor Ricky
