Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

P.S. The rating has been updated.

This is a fun poem on its own merit but it was entered in a limerick contest and your beat/inflection is way off for a limerick.

Look at "The last prank" and "OCDont you dare" in the same contest to see the correct inflection,.and also see the rules for the contest.

Again, this is a five star poem on its own merit, but I must take off a star because your poem doesn't confirm to the limerick rules.

I'll be happy to re-rate if edits are made.

 Comment Written 20-May-2023

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reply by the author on 20-May-2023

thanks i will revise it

reply by Eternal Muse on 20-May-2023

This is a very rough draft, but to give you an idea:

Our newsworthy president Trump
Is taking his morning time rump
Firing off daily tweets
filled with hatred and cheat
In the end - what a toxic wast
dump!

Comment from Monica Chaddick

Excellent

Oh, boy did you hit THAT nail on the head! He actually is the dump being taken, but still a great poem. Lots of people probably won't comment because it is political, but you definitely have my vote - something which he will NEVER have!

 Comment Written 19-May-2023

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reply by the author on 19-May-2023

thanks I had fun with this and wanted it to be crude and lewd in the spirit of the limerick form.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Jake,
This limerick is witty, but sadly true. President Trump is a toxic personality with the hate and anger he spues on line and over the airwaves.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan

 Comment Written 18-May-2023

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reply by the author on 18-May-2023

thanks it was fun to write and I wanted it to be lewd and crude in the spirit of the limerick form.

reply by dragonpoet on 19-May-2023

You're welcome. Jake. You are right that being crude is in true limerick form.
Joan

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

You've chosen a controversial topic for your limerick. It is sure to catch attention. The rhymes are well done and the form is excellent.
Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

thanks it was fun to write.

Comment from Nicki Nance

Excellent

I am buzzing in resonance.as this is a sentiment I share with you. Your courage to post it gives it a lot of punch. I hope you have an audience worthy of this respectfully yet powerfully written contnt

 Comment Written 15-May-2023

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reply by the author on 16-May-2023

thanks a lot. it was fun to write

Comment from Mario PIERRE

Excellent

Lewd and crude, yes it is!! Good limerick, the rhyming pattern conforms to the format. I would think that any verse should not exceed 10 syllables though, and preferably in trimeter form.

 Comment Written 15-May-2023

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reply by the author on 16-May-2023

thanks a lot. it was fun to write