Be Wee With Bea Part 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Bird With the Guiding Light"Third in a series is quite sad in the beginning.
9 total reviews
Comment from De'Vanese John-Baptiste
This is a difficult read, I am sure it is less complicated in context when the reader has time to adjust to all the characters. However, may be less mention of the species of each and everything the main character comes across. This is a short entry, yet the main character takes notice of a bird, a beer, a snake, fish, and bees. On top of that, there are also characters named as such, "Snakey". Maybe try only mentioning, the characters important to the scene, and just describing the presence of the other characters. Trust the intelligence of your reader! If the book says the character hears the buzz of an animal's wings, the readers infer it is a bee, there is no need to mention it.
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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This is a difficult read, I am sure it is less complicated in context when the reader has time to adjust to all the characters. However, may be less mention of the species of each and everything the main character comes across. This is a short entry, yet the main character takes notice of a bird, a beer, a snake, fish, and bees. On top of that, there are also characters named as such, "Snakey". Maybe try only mentioning, the characters important to the scene, and just describing the presence of the other characters. Trust the intelligence of your reader! If the book says the character hears the buzz of an animal's wings, the readers infer it is a bee, there is no need to mention it.
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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I guess I appreciate your effort to come in cold to my story, however a two star is life a D on a writing paper, no one who even treds upon these hallowed pages deserves a D. If you want to get the sense of the book, feel
free to peruse my portfolio. No review is necessary.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"Tree tops" should be treetops.
"humming bird," if meaning the species, should be hummingbird.
"Giant bird"? Would a hummingbird be considered a giant bird?
Seems the animals help each other, a valuable lesson humans would do well to learn.
reply by the author on 15-May-2023
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"Tree tops" should be treetops.
"humming bird," if meaning the species, should be hummingbird.
"Giant bird"? Would a hummingbird be considered a giant bird?
Seems the animals help each other, a valuable lesson humans would do well to learn.
Comment Written 15-May-2023
reply by the author on 15-May-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. There is intimated a UFO which Bea can only reference to a hummingbird's behavior.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I am a little confused about one thing. There was a light compared to a hummingbird, and then the light became. a bird and flys off. I think a picture would help at this point. If this doesn't ring true for you just ignore. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. I am a little confused about one thing. There was a light compared to a hummingbird, and then the light became. a bird and flys off. I think a picture would help at this point. If this doesn't ring true for you just ignore. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. I am intimating the possibility of the perceived bird actually being a UFO. Some have seen it as a spiritual being. That's the beauty of it, it is left open.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely, evocative continuation of this story with Bea and her charges being led by a resplendent bird to a river to feed. The colours and illumination fire up the imagination particularly for children and convey this sense of unwavering purpose to get the puppies to their deserved safety. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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A lovely, evocative continuation of this story with Bea and her charges being led by a resplendent bird to a river to feed. The colours and illumination fire up the imagination particularly for children and convey this sense of unwavering purpose to get the puppies to their deserved safety. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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This review is so good. Thank you. It is exceptional.Thank y
Comment from lyenochka
I thought that I had already reviewed this story. But it's been rather busy with travel and house stuff.
I like how Spidie and Snakeley have such a close friendship that they even share meals.
It's good that Bea consults the Maker of birds as she follows the guiding bird of colorful light.
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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I thought that I had already reviewed this story. But it's been rather busy with travel and house stuff.
I like how Spidie and Snakeley have such a close friendship that they even share meals.
It's good that Bea consults the Maker of birds as she follows the guiding bird of colorful light.
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Thank you for thinking of me to review. I'm sure your are overwhelmed with plethora of messages, in addition to the real challenges. I hope your strength on all levels is holding up
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a joy to read.
did her brain exercise (Wouldn't our society be a lot better if everyone took a pause before acting? or as I used to tell my first graders take a break and engage brain.)
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a joy to read.
did her brain exercise (Wouldn't our society be a lot better if everyone took a pause before acting? or as I used to tell my first graders take a break and engage brain.)
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you for your insightful review. How cool that you said that to your first graders
Comment from aryr
This was a fantastic continuation chapter, absolutely fantastic, Liz. With Bea, Spidie and Snakely leading the puppies to a safe place. They were safe from the humans. Although Bea was lonely and Spidie and Snakely did not have ideal food, they would survive. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This was a fantastic continuation chapter, absolutely fantastic, Liz. With Bea, Spidie and Snakely leading the puppies to a safe place. They were safe from the humans. Although Bea was lonely and Spidie and Snakely did not have ideal food, they would survive. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you for the delightful review.
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You are most welcome, Liz.
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Comment from Jay Squires
This chapter was the best I've read recently, with the conspicuously UFO description of the light that hovered above them like a humming-bird (I really liked that simile) and at the end got smaller and smaller until it sped off. Yes ... very mysterious, very spiritual.
Jay
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This chapter was the best I've read recently, with the conspicuously UFO description of the light that hovered above them like a humming-bird (I really liked that simile) and at the end got smaller and smaller until it sped off. Yes ... very mysterious, very spiritual.
Jay
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you for your comprehensive review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The saving of the puppies is an interesting story. This almost reads like an illustrated novel with lots of things going on. I'm not sure why Bea isn't to know that Spidie is sharing her bugs with Snakely.
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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The saving of the puppies is an interesting story. This almost reads like an illustrated novel with lots of things going on. I'm not sure why Bea isn't to know that Spidie is sharing her bugs with Snakely.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thank you for your review. Spidie and Snakely were riding all of the time upon Bea's arm & ears. So she did not know they were eating, even if it wasn't fish like the others. It adds to the humor.
