Passion For Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Bottom"Book 3 of assorted poems
10 total reviews
Comment from Nina Sexton
Such deep emotional pain here. Family has a way of ruining lives but the damage is mostly done when the ties are bound. Once cut, healing can truly start. Nice work here.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Such deep emotional pain here. Family has a way of ruining lives but the damage is mostly done when the ties are bound. Once cut, healing can truly start. Nice work here.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Nina, for your kind comments. And for your insight, very refreshingredients.
Thank you for your time and fine review, always important to me. I hope you're have a great evening, thanks again!
Comment from pome lover
Practice of pain? What kind and how?
That is terrible. I hope your sons defended you. If you don't mind my asking - since you mentioned it - what were you recovering from and what did your parents say about you?
Katharine
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Practice of pain? What kind and how?
That is terrible. I hope your sons defended you. If you don't mind my asking - since you mentioned it - what were you recovering from and what did your parents say about you?
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Hi katharine. Unfortunately, my family is full of many dark souls, and it is to their joy and fun and personal entertainment to pick a family member for their personal round of torture. They do not understand the nature of integrity or honesty, my family systematically set out to ruin both personally and professionally. Unfortunately, I am not the only one. I spent 20 years away from them to return and find more of the same. I have had to live down many reputations my family has created for me. This time I had to walk away and not come back. Thank you for your kind words for your kind review and for your insight, we're just mass refreshi thank you too also for your heartfelt questions for which I am grateful. No I really hope you're having a great evening. Thank you again.
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well, your picture is lovely. And I hope you are self sufficient and happy now.
Katharine
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Ty Katharine! I'm good thx!
Comment from JSD
Heartfelt and moving piece of personal free verse. Your language is taut and does not get caught up in maudlin. Instead your strength bursts out of your powerful expression. I too near 60 and my life is a bit sh*t. I can't see my daughter. You have inspired me to try to give voice to those feelings. Brilliant. Thank you. John
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Heartfelt and moving piece of personal free verse. Your language is taut and does not get caught up in maudlin. Instead your strength bursts out of your powerful expression. I too near 60 and my life is a bit sh*t. I can't see my daughter. You have inspired me to try to give voice to those feelings. Brilliant. Thank you. John
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Thank you. John yes you know you couldn't pick a more healthier outlet than to write about. What's going on. And every time we do it peels the onion and take some of that power away. Good on you for the most awesome choice. I could have made and the healthiest outlet on this planet is found I think personally. Thank you again john !
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a powerful but slightly cryptic poem that made more sense after reading the author's notes. I thought you had an interesting reference in this line: the door of future recovery slams with smiles
It sounds like family support was not only lacking, it was devious and destructive. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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This is a powerful but slightly cryptic poem that made more sense after reading the author's notes. I thought you had an interesting reference in this line: the door of future recovery slams with smiles
It sounds like family support was not only lacking, it was devious and destructive. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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You're absolutely right and your insight serves you well part of the reason? I put the notes because I tend to write a bit abstrictly doesn't always make sense to others and I need to be mindful of that for sure. So I put down an explanation I sand I thank you once again for your review and actually your time. You always have amazing comments and have such great knowledge and insight into whatever I write so that I appreciate. So much and you're time and your and your stars you award. Thank you so much have a great night!
Comment from Lobber
Good evening,
Whether you like it or not, we are indeed fated to be soulmates. On March 11, 2019 (my birthday), I posted my first FS poem - A Fateful Yet Curious Conundrum - https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=931307
He fell
From off the horse -
A much easier fall
Than if he had fallen from off
The floor
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My post raised eyebrows and confusion. Yet my world is a nursery rhyme compared to the brutal world you portray in The Bottom. I have no more tears to share, but I do understand your use of our common metaphor - falling off the floor.
Let my heart and soul guide you, my Friend.
- Lobber (aka Jerry)
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Good evening,
Whether you like it or not, we are indeed fated to be soulmates. On March 11, 2019 (my birthday), I posted my first FS poem - A Fateful Yet Curious Conundrum - https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=931307
He fell
From off the horse -
A much easier fall
Than if he had fallen from off
The floor
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My post raised eyebrows and confusion. Yet my world is a nursery rhyme compared to the brutal world you portray in The Bottom. I have no more tears to share, but I do understand your use of our common metaphor - falling off the floor.
Let my heart and soul guide you, my Friend.
- Lobber (aka Jerry)
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Holy smokes Jerry! That's amazing! To make your point something to share. Take What I'm about to say and throw away the rest. I tell everyone that I "read" for this statement take what means something to you and throw away the rest. When a child grows up in an environment like mine we learn to be hyper vigilant and from this hypervigilance comes ability. In my family ability comes in two ways here's a thing that line through genetic specifically and/or systematic abuse. Ability or 6th sense consists of a high acuity in understanding human behavior, high sensitivity to emotion... A thickness or a pressure in the air changes. One or more of what that person or person's feelings will filter through me and I will have a deeper understanding. And lastly not to filter the images or sounds that come to me but to let it fall out as if from a tap. If I put my own interpretation on it I'm likely to get it wrong and steer somebody in the wrong direction that would not be line with my intentions. It is a long story intertwined with the bio that I'm writing, I've just put out chapter 2. It's called "Ghost although it's very difficult at times. it has to be done as this a precautionary tale. So in addition to writing I make jewelry, breed pomeranians and I give readings as a medium. Thousands literally thousands follow my business pages. And if one person is helped by what I have to say and I am satisfied. So what I do is subjective there's no doubut it's OK people have to live within their own skin and what means something to them but the soul knows truth when it hears it does it not? Now having said what you have said regarding falling off the floor this tea does 1 of 2 things for me and that is validation In the fact that nothing in life is coincidence so let us see where that brings us. In the meantime thank you so very much for your kind and insightful review and for your awesome writing. I appreciate this and I appreciate you I hope that you're having a wonderful evening thanks again!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about toxic family and how you survived their abuse. I'm sorry you have to deal with that. That kind of grief is hard to deal with. They sound like horrible people. Thank God you have your wonderful sons.
The free verse forced flows well. Good entry for the Free Verse Poetry Contest.
good luck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Excellent poem about toxic family and how you survived their abuse. I'm sorry you have to deal with that. That kind of grief is hard to deal with. They sound like horrible people. Thank God you have your wonderful sons.
The free verse forced flows well. Good entry for the Free Verse Poetry Contest.
good luck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your review i'm always happy to have them and I'm always appreciating your comments and have such thoughtful things to say.
You're inside is very cool too and I thank you for that as well. I hope you have a great fabulous day thanks again!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a powerful and poignant write full of determination and strength and these situations turn us into fighters and I am glad you have had a successful life as an adult and raised two sons, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This is a powerful and poignant write full of determination and strength and these situations turn us into fighters and I am glad you have had a successful life as an adult and raised two sons, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you Dolly for your kind words. I appreciate you and your input. It is a journey we take once we put pen to paper I think. I was told if I was going to write I should write about what I know and I thought to myself you don't want to know what I know. But then again yes they do. Thank you again Dolly!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This speaks badly about your family situation and I fear that you had it rough while growing up. The poem appears to be one run-on sentence and I appreciate what you are writing but it would appear clearer if you finished a thought before going on to the next one.
I hope this helps some. Thanks for sharing your world of deceit and subterfuge.
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This speaks badly about your family situation and I fear that you had it rough while growing up. The poem appears to be one run-on sentence and I appreciate what you are writing but it would appear clearer if you finished a thought before going on to the next one.
I hope this helps some. Thanks for sharing your world of deceit and subterfuge.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you Jessie for your kind review in your comments. I take them all to heart and look at them. Seriously appreciate also your ti'm and you're insight especially thank you have a great day!
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Glad I could help.
Have a great day as well.
Comment from JT traveller
Powerful words from a strong, resilient woman. I wish I had six stars as this struck a chord with me. Laying your soul bare lends itself to your exceptional writing. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Powerful words from a strong, resilient woman. I wish I had six stars as this struck a chord with me. Laying your soul bare lends itself to your exceptional writing. Jacqueline
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you that's really kind of you to say. Appreciate your insight always refreshing to be understood most of us want that. Thank you for your review and for your time I always appreciate it from you. I hope you have a great night!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Why was your family so mean to you? You are a very nice lady and deserve much better. I had a very traumatic childhood, too. My parents fought a lot and my mother had many lovers. When I came here, I was so happy. It was hard in the beginning but I prevailed.
I'm glad you have two very successful sons and grandchildren.
Excellent and good luck.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Why was your family so mean to you? You are a very nice lady and deserve much better. I had a very traumatic childhood, too. My parents fought a lot and my mother had many lovers. When I came here, I was so happy. It was hard in the beginning but I prevailed.
I'm glad you have two very successful sons and grandchildren.
Excellent and good luck.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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I'm so very glad you prevailed and sorry you went through what you went through. I know that kind of pain is terrible. I'm happy to see you are happy in your life and doing well? Perhaps a long relocation is in my future. We shall see thank you again through fine grading and your review. I hope you The sun is shining where you are!
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Yes. It was sunny today and we had a great walk on the pebble beach of Lake Superior.
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Sounds beautiful but it's one massive lake pretty cool how it behaves like an ocean.