The Caterpillar & The Butterfly
A lesson in patience16 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Congratulations on the win. Your fable does have an important lesson that having patience. It is perfect as a teaching story for patience both for children and us older ones too.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Congratulations on the win. Your fable does have an important lesson that having patience. It is perfect as a teaching story for patience both for children and us older ones too.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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thanks so much, Mary!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Congratulations on this win! A lovely little fable with a fitting moral at the end. The story-telling is a delight to read for adults and obviously children would love it especially, if like I did once, they spend their free time hunting caterpillars! Well done again! Debbie
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Congratulations on this win! A lovely little fable with a fitting moral at the end. The story-telling is a delight to read for adults and obviously children would love it especially, if like I did once, they spend their free time hunting caterpillars! Well done again! Debbie
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie!
Comment from Sanku
patience is a great virtue which we all should have .Its something in short supply for me.LOL i enjoyed your fable and it is very suitable story to be read aloud to a child.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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patience is a great virtue which we all should have .Its something in short supply for me.LOL i enjoyed your fable and it is very suitable story to be read aloud to a child.
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Ricky1024
Wonderfully written rich and Theme and Imagery.
Note:
In the beginning you posted Chloe as a He instead of a she.
Otherwise,
Eventually crafted with a wonderful lesson prepared in the end.
Note:
We all learned patience as adults but as young children.
Yes, it takes quite a few years.
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When my grandson Alexander Herve Valle.
(Who is now a rather large adolescent) was a very young child of maybe three.
He would play with his smaller and lesser friend Justin.
The problem was that it was hard for Alex to share his Thomas choo choo's!
I noticed him get aggressive one day and he pushed little Justin right to the floor in my living room!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Wonderfully written rich and Theme and Imagery.
Note:
In the beginning you posted Chloe as a He instead of a she.
Otherwise,
Eventually crafted with a wonderful lesson prepared in the end.
Note:
We all learned patience as adults but as young children.
Yes, it takes quite a few years.
...
When my grandson Alexander Herve Valle.
(Who is now a rather large adolescent) was a very young child of maybe three.
He would play with his smaller and lesser friend Justin.
The problem was that it was hard for Alex to share his Thomas choo choo's!
I noticed him get aggressive one day and he pushed little Justin right to the floor in my living room!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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I understand that completely! I see it between my daughters, patience seems to be very tough for them. Thank you so much!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is an excellent portrayal of how one needs to be patient otherwise, one will probably come to an undesirable end.
I loved how you told the modern fable with the use of a caterpillar and a butterfly to show the metamorphosis of one to the other.
This complete transformation from one to the other is amazing and shows off the best side of the story that patience is a virtue at all costs.
Thanks for telling this modernized fable!
It spells out the reason why we all should be patient.
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This is an excellent portrayal of how one needs to be patient otherwise, one will probably come to an undesirable end.
I loved how you told the modern fable with the use of a caterpillar and a butterfly to show the metamorphosis of one to the other.
This complete transformation from one to the other is amazing and shows off the best side of the story that patience is a virtue at all costs.
Thanks for telling this modernized fable!
It spells out the reason why we all should be patient.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thanks so much, Jesse! Patience seems to be lacking these days!
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So true! Patience needs to be our first priority in life not the last thing we go to when we want to grow.
Jesse
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. Yes, patience is very important in most things. I enjoyed reading.
Bella kindly revealed that she'd once been a caterpillar (you can omit 'that' it's an extra word and not needed)
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. Yes, patience is very important in most things. I enjoyed reading.
Bella kindly revealed that she'd once been a caterpillar (you can omit 'that' it's an extra word and not needed)
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you, Barbara!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very lovely and very well written modern fable you have penned about Cleo having to learn patience to be able to finally get her wings strong enough to fly. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This is a very lovely and very well written modern fable you have penned about Cleo having to learn patience to be able to finally get her wings strong enough to fly. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Enjoyed reading your story. Patience is a characteristic that we need to experience in the world today. The story is told with lots of imagery presentation.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Enjoyed reading your story. Patience is a characteristic that we need to experience in the world today. The story is told with lots of imagery presentation.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much! I appreciate that. :)
Xo
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Good theme and nicely developed story. The tale is about the consequences of impatience or rushing to embark on a journey without proper planning.
Well done!!
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Good theme and nicely developed story. The tale is about the consequences of impatience or rushing to embark on a journey without proper planning.
Well done!!
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much! I appreciate that. :)
Xo
Comment from Wendy G
Dry true. A fine fable, although I did think it would have died if it came out of the chrysalis too soon. But at least she lived anc learned a valuable lesson. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Dry true. A fine fable, although I did think it would have died if it came out of the chrysalis too soon. But at least she lived anc learned a valuable lesson. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Yes I imagine it would! Thank you so much. I appreciate your review.
Xo