Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "The Great Demise"A compilation of poems
8 total reviews
Comment from Paul Manton
Hi Lea. You're quite right about the loss of artesian water. Now, in places like Western Australia, because it has not rained for three years, there is nothing left underground - all the cattle have died or been sold - and millions of acres of former farmland is reverting to desert. And this is happening all over the world - especially (as in Ethiopia) where vast forests have been felled to create farms in the first place.
A really good Lune poem 5-3-5 with both rhyme and semi-alliteration in the first line alone! The perfect picture is picked up by 'cracklin' earth, and the results are obvious: the planet is dying - becoming unable to sustain life of any kind - and the lack of water, and subsequently, food will see huge populations starve.
A powerful message in thirteen syllables! Thank you, Lea.
Paul
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Hi Lea. You're quite right about the loss of artesian water. Now, in places like Western Australia, because it has not rained for three years, there is nothing left underground - all the cattle have died or been sold - and millions of acres of former farmland is reverting to desert. And this is happening all over the world - especially (as in Ethiopia) where vast forests have been felled to create farms in the first place.
A really good Lune poem 5-3-5 with both rhyme and semi-alliteration in the first line alone! The perfect picture is picked up by 'cracklin' earth, and the results are obvious: the planet is dying - becoming unable to sustain life of any kind - and the lack of water, and subsequently, food will see huge populations starve.
A powerful message in thirteen syllables! Thank you, Lea.
Paul
Comment Written 04-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Hi Paul, thank you so much for your review. I'm always happy to hear from you!
The state of affairs for our planet is near and dear to my heart. I'm always advocating or producing clips on climate change. i focus on something with that in mind. There is a knowing that I have. I should leave that statement alone and say that.
The planet will live on. But we will not because we will no longer be able to sustain our life form. It will take a long time eons for our Earth to recover from what we now do to it. I don't think you need to be a rocket scientist or psychic to see that Thank you for having a read and commenting I would appreciate it. And there's a chapter and i've written called Becoming and then another chapter called Becoming more.
They're later on in life, it's part of an auto bio, my life has been anything but peaceful, very tumultuous. Eventually, I hope for peace but there are things I must do. There is first 3 chapters 1 two, and 3. Ability sad to say, is often born of one or both thing, a genetic ability or a familiar predisposition to know things. Others do not 2 is extreme trauma. It creates a hyper vigilance which feeds into that genetic component if you have both you have a powerful psychic, it is sad reality That such a thing must be made in this way. Anyway, good to hear from you.
I see that you have oreview of the month, one month, and it came in 2nd the another month. So congratulations to you on that. That is an amazing accomplishment way to go I hope you're having a grand day!
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Thanks Lea. Yes I know about precognition alright - as an empath I often scare myself with predictions!
With the reviewing (got to be careful what I say) it is not allowed to win two months running. Didn't know that.
Love from Paul
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Thank you Paul. You get it I knew you would
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Keep well, Lea.
Love from Paul
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent lune poem, Lea. Tis true that soil erosion is rapidly degrading the land so it can support fewer and fewer plants. I have no idea why this pressing environmental issue caused by climate change isn't pushed more into the foreground. I guess people just don't believe it.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Excellent lune poem, Lea. Tis true that soil erosion is rapidly degrading the land so it can support fewer and fewer plants. I have no idea why this pressing environmental issue caused by climate change isn't pushed more into the foreground. I guess people just don't believe it.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Gloria for your kind words and for your review. I appreciate your time and your effort. Yes, this is a subject That is close to my heart, people don't believe it. It's sad because denial doesn't make it not true. Thank you again for stopping in and having a read. I very much appreciate it and I hope you have the best evening.!
Comment from JT traveller
Beautiful presentation. Your words cascade like a wonderful waterfall. Send me some inspiration as I am sending so many positive vibes your way right now. A complete composure. Jacqueline xx
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Beautiful presentation. Your words cascade like a wonderful waterfall. Send me some inspiration as I am sending so many positive vibes your way right now. A complete composure. Jacqueline xx
Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much again! Humbled and honored!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, when God gave authority to man concerning creation, He expected us to be good stewards, but because we've fallen short and become lovers of Money and expediency, leaving the care to the partially caring, we've reaped what we've sown, it's the heart of man that needs changing, not the law. Nothing to do with religion either, Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Oh yes, when God gave authority to man concerning creation, He expected us to be good stewards, but because we've fallen short and become lovers of Money and expediency, leaving the care to the partially caring, we've reaped what we've sown, it's the heart of man that needs changing, not the law. Nothing to do with religion either, Blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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You're absolutely right. It speaks to the core of who we are and I think we've lost some things along the way. I hope that when this cometic ends that we come together as one. Thank you, Roy, for your fine review. Always happy to receive them and always respect them. Thank you, and have a great night!
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Well done Lea
Comment from JSD
Always surprising with your language Lea. This is another great piece. Love the 'crackling' sounds of the first line, leading into the second, with the hard 'k' and the 'i' assonance. Love the way not the sun, but the earth dims, and the last phrase just wins the whole thing. Never expected that, and that's what it should be. Well done. John
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Always surprising with your language Lea. This is another great piece. Love the 'crackling' sounds of the first line, leading into the second, with the hard 'k' and the 'i' assonance. Love the way not the sun, but the earth dims, and the last phrase just wins the whole thing. Never expected that, and that's what it should be. Well done. John
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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I am super happy that you are getting something out of my writing and that you are enjoying it. I always thought if only one person like it then i've done my job thank you very much again!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a funny poem about this amazing photo. I like the last line: planet dims - tongue lolls. I guess it is a serious crisis. We all need to worry and act on preventing further damage to our home: earth.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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What a funny poem about this amazing photo. I like the last line: planet dims - tongue lolls. I guess it is a serious crisis. We all need to worry and act on preventing further damage to our home: earth.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you Jasmine I'm really glad you liked it. Yes definitely a contradiction when looking at the picture for appreciate your comments and you're can't review and then for your time as always I'm happy to. Have you and your kind advice thank you have a great day!
Comment from Rosemarie L Tharp
Nice poem. And certainly not a common topic - so points for that.
Small note: "Worlds light dims" its a bit cumbersome to say/ read especially after "earth" which is a stressed syllable. "Worlds light dims" is stressed stressed unstressed, following a stressed "earth". I think that why it sounds weird. I don't really know. I was sick when they thought that in school. The point is it doesn't flow well there and could benefit from a rewrite. I mean you don't have to. It's just what I noticed.
Also you need a comma there.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Nice poem. And certainly not a common topic - so points for that.
Small note: "Worlds light dims" its a bit cumbersome to say/ read especially after "earth" which is a stressed syllable. "Worlds light dims" is stressed stressed unstressed, following a stressed "earth". I think that why it sounds weird. I don't really know. I was sick when they thought that in school. The point is it doesn't flow well there and could benefit from a rewrite. I mean you don't have to. It's just what I noticed.
Also you need a comma there.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
I took your advice and changed. Thx again!
OK thank you Rosemary for your input and for your review. I appreciate it! I hope you have a great night! thank you for the tip!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write about climate change and how we are contributing to the demise of our planet. We are slowly learned to take better care of more Earth, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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A poignant write about climate change and how we are contributing to the demise of our planet. We are slowly learned to take better care of more Earth, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much jolly I'm really glad you like it. I'm also happy that you're able to go over my work and you are one of the great. You are so thank you again have a good evening!
