One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The image presentation is nicely done and effective.
It would be appreciated to have some author notes with your poetry. I miss reading the notes.
it is a free verse poem-no need for syllable count
the lines are wonderfully written.
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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The image presentation is nicely done and effective.
It would be appreciated to have some author notes with your poetry. I miss reading the notes.
it is a free verse poem-no need for syllable count
the lines are wonderfully written.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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I do have author notes about free verse. There's not much to say, free verse doesn't have any rules.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, I really like the way your last stanza brings all my thoughts to a moment that I desire while waiting with my dreams, knowing that it is possible, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Excellent, I really like the way your last stanza brings all my thoughts to a moment that I desire while waiting with my dreams, knowing that it is possible, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you, Kym. I appreciate your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from rspoet
Hello Gypsy,
This is a marvelous free verse pulsing with emotion
and wonderful imagery of both the ocean and the storm.
I like the idea of sharing the same ocean breeze,
despite the tide pulling apart.
Then the possibility of the reunion, the fear and tension of missing it.
And of course there is the dream, the storm, the electricity
that form the climax of the poem.
Brimming with poetic images.
Best wishes to you and good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Hello Gypsy,
This is a marvelous free verse pulsing with emotion
and wonderful imagery of both the ocean and the storm.
I like the idea of sharing the same ocean breeze,
despite the tide pulling apart.
Then the possibility of the reunion, the fear and tension of missing it.
And of course there is the dream, the storm, the electricity
that form the climax of the poem.
Brimming with poetic images.
Best wishes to you and good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Robert. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words. It means a lot coming from you. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a great and moving free verse. I especially like the last two lines. You described the imagined love affair so real that I could hear the thunder caused by it.
I have a question:
wonder what would I say -> wonder what I would say?
Excellent.
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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What a great and moving free verse. I especially like the last two lines. You described the imagined love affair so real that I could hear the thunder caused by it.
I have a question:
wonder what would I say -> wonder what I would say?
Excellent.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you very much for your time and exceptional six stars review. I changed that line. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----I had a dream similar to this, except in my dream our love was the Titanic and reality the iceberg that sunk our love with all hands--well, two hands anyway!
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----I had a dream similar to this, except in my dream our love was the Titanic and reality the iceberg that sunk our love with all hands--well, two hands anyway!
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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LoL that is funny.
Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, I really appreciate it. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Metaphor after metaphor in this very passionate, yet innocent contest entry. I absolutely loved it. I can't imagine a better poem in this contest, but I'll wish you luck. Sometimes these contests don't come out the way they should.
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Metaphor after metaphor in this very passionate, yet innocent contest entry. I absolutely loved it. I can't imagine a better poem in this contest, but I'll wish you luck. Sometimes these contests don't come out the way they should.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you for the exceptional six stars review and kind feedback.
Gypsy
"May the road rise up to meet you. May the wind be always at your back. May the sun shine warm upon your face" - celtic prayer
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy,
Your free verse poem is full of passion. You've done this burning passion really nicely, Gypsy.
I like the way you use serendipity in the phrase of missing his hello.
Nice work, Gypsy.
I'm well. I hope all is well with you too
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Gypsy,
Your free verse poem is full of passion. You've done this burning passion really nicely, Gypsy.
I like the way you use serendipity in the phrase of missing his hello.
Nice work, Gypsy.
I'm well. I hope all is well with you too
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, I really appreciate it. May you have a wonderful day. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. This was wonderful. I enjoyed your dual pictures because they showed the difference within an ebb tide or not. Your words distinctly showed the differences. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. This was wonderful. I enjoyed your dual pictures because they showed the difference within an ebb tide or not. Your words distinctly showed the differences. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, I really appreciate it. May you have a wonderful day. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so very welcome, Kay.
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Gypsy :)
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Amazing!
Well written, powerful and tastefully sensual.
The images are well-chosen to complement the words and the overall presentation is perfect.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Amazing!
Well written, powerful and tastefully sensual.
The images are well-chosen to complement the words and the overall presentation is perfect.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Shirley. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
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You're welcome.
Comment from Jim Wile
This is a beautiful poem, Gypsy, of an unrequited love from a woman who fantasizes about a man she knows only well enough to say hello to. She senses him drifting away but holds out hope that the little that binds them together (the same ocean breeze) might be enough to keep him in her life, and that there is still the possibility that someday his affection will be returned. Very beautiful and sensual. Jim
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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This is a beautiful poem, Gypsy, of an unrequited love from a woman who fantasizes about a man she knows only well enough to say hello to. She senses him drifting away but holds out hope that the little that binds them together (the same ocean breeze) might be enough to keep him in her life, and that there is still the possibility that someday his affection will be returned. Very beautiful and sensual. Jim
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Jim. I appreciate your excellent insightful review and kind words.
Gypsy