Heaven's Door
I could have lived the rest of my life on this boat.10 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written contest entry you have penned for the By the Sea contest. You used very good descriptive words talking about the time you spent with your friends and how relaxing it was. Best wishes in the contest. teri
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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This is a very well written contest entry you have penned for the By the Sea contest. You used very good descriptive words talking about the time you spent with your friends and how relaxing it was. Best wishes in the contest. teri
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much Teri. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Julie Lau
I very much enjoyed your account of experiences by the sea. People's experiences can be so different, but the sea always fascinates. Just a few points:
'crime-ridden' needs a hyphen
make 'beachcombing' one word
add 'ed' to snorkeled
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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I very much enjoyed your account of experiences by the sea. People's experiences can be so different, but the sea always fascinates. Just a few points:
'crime-ridden' needs a hyphen
make 'beachcombing' one word
add 'ed' to snorkeled
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Made the adjustments. Thanks so much for your kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like you had a wonderful childhood and your memories are still vivid now that you are retired and it is a pity that you have settled somewhere away from the sea you love so much, a fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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It sounds like you had a wonderful childhood and your memories are still vivid now that you are retired and it is a pity that you have settled somewhere away from the sea you love so much, a fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful set of reflections on what were some very happy experiences. You still have your memories and your dreams and you described them very well. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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A beautiful set of reflections on what were some very happy experiences. You still have your memories and your dreams and you described them very well. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
What a great name for a ship and what a wonderful life you lived along the oceans. Yours is the only life I envy as mine was pretty great along a creek and forest and a neighborhood full of kids (who also didn't make wise decisions, but we all survived). This is a very good entry in the by the sea contest. You really need to haul out your pictures and enjoy them for as long as you can.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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What a great name for a ship and what a wonderful life you lived along the oceans. Yours is the only life I envy as mine was pretty great along a creek and forest and a neighborhood full of kids (who also didn't make wise decisions, but we all survived). This is a very good entry in the by the sea contest. You really need to haul out your pictures and enjoy them for as long as you can.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you for reviewing. I plan on digging out the pictures. Good suggestion.
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I'm just getting over a mild case of Covid and when I did my review of your story, I was looking at all the books of pictures I collected over the years for my kids mainly as they were all adopted. So glad I took the time to make them and leave them out (slightly dusty) for the kids to see.
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I hope you are doing ok. We all had covid in my house even though we all had been vaccinated. It was not fun. God bless and keep you well.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job sharing these memories in your
contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading them.
This could only have been written by one who lived and
loved the water. I enjoyed the different locales of the
places mentioned in your entry. I'm not to sure I would
head out on a homemade sailboat. I would love to find
some shells and sea glass on the beaches. I know many
artists use driftwood in their projects.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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You did a great job sharing these memories in your
contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading them.
This could only have been written by one who lived and
loved the water. I enjoyed the different locales of the
places mentioned in your entry. I'm not to sure I would
head out on a homemade sailboat. I would love to find
some shells and sea glass on the beaches. I know many
artists use driftwood in their projects.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thanks for reviewing. I have many bottles of sand and shells on a bookshelf. Really like the black sand from Hawaii and the golden sand from the Florida coast.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What an amazing account of your love of the sea and all the adventures you've had. Your prose is infused with joy and excitement at those memories which are conveyed so vividly. Interesting too that those sea-loving experiences didn't stop in childhood and you obviously leapt at the opportunity to sail with friends from Bermuda to Florida and enjoyed (I'm sure) the accompanying rescue. I think the imagery of salt hanging in the air and coating your hair is very evocative although I'm a little perplexed by your reference to 'ashes' in that sentence. All in all an excellent write and a strong contender for the contest! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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What an amazing account of your love of the sea and all the adventures you've had. Your prose is infused with joy and excitement at those memories which are conveyed so vividly. Interesting too that those sea-loving experiences didn't stop in childhood and you obviously leapt at the opportunity to sail with friends from Bermuda to Florida and enjoyed (I'm sure) the accompanying rescue. I think the imagery of salt hanging in the air and coating your hair is very evocative although I'm a little perplexed by your reference to 'ashes' in that sentence. All in all an excellent write and a strong contender for the contest! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you so much for that pickup. None of my other reviewers got it and neither did my editor. Fixed it and thank you again for your great review.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from zanya
It's an interesting topic for the contest and a really engrossing approach to the theme here, conveying a deep sense of the love of the sea - even finding a message in a bottle -really enjoyed it !
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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It's an interesting topic for the contest and a really engrossing approach to the theme here, conveying a deep sense of the love of the sea - even finding a message in a bottle -really enjoyed it !
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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I had a very interesting childhood and my love of the sea stems from those adventures. If my parents only knew, I am sure they would have restricted us to the yard.. Thanks for your kind review and the six stars. A real honor.
Comment from Elizabeth Henderson
Your title should be "Heaven's Door" (missing apostrophe). I wish you'd describe your time on the boat with your friends using more imagery to fit your title. It's not that your childhood at the beach was not significant; it was. However, the narrative could also describe how the beach is like Heaven's door. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Your title should be "Heaven's Door" (missing apostrophe). I wish you'd describe your time on the boat with your friends using more imagery to fit your title. It's not that your childhood at the beach was not significant; it was. However, the narrative could also describe how the beach is like Heaven's door. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you for reviewing. Fixed the title. One of the friends was the love of my life and passed away soon after the trip. It was his dream to do it. To difficult to expand on more.
Comment from royowen
It sounds like an idyllic trip on the good ship "Heaven's door" a great name for the unseen wonders you might experience on your trip. I reminisce about my misspent youth and travels, done without fear or regret, youth is a wonder. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : to our heart(')s content.
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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It sounds like an idyllic trip on the good ship "Heaven's door" a great name for the unseen wonders you might experience on your trip. I reminisce about my misspent youth and travels, done without fear or regret, youth is a wonder. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : to our heart(')s content.
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Fixed it. Thank you so much my friend for your kind review and comments.
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Most welcome