Songs of Recovery
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Life with ED"A collection of poems around healing.
4 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I love the analogy of words being stones, but as if tossed into a pool, causes ripples and that, like gossip can have a terrible affect, I love the wording of this, an exposition that is frank, but beautifully written my friends blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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I love the analogy of words being stones, but as if tossed into a pool, causes ripples and that, like gossip can have a terrible affect, I love the wording of this, an exposition that is frank, but beautifully written my friends blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, Roy. I really appreciate your time and attention to it. I hope you have a wonderful weekend.
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Well done
Comment from Douglas Goff
My goodness, that all sounds pretty horrid. I must admit initially i thought you were referencing a different ED and I thought we were going to get a woman's take. Not quite.
Great writing with this line:
If you want part of your answer, turn to the mind:
first outside, then inside, as we shape the lens.
Great description of the disease.
D
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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My goodness, that all sounds pretty horrid. I must admit initially i thought you were referencing a different ED and I thought we were going to get a woman's take. Not quite.
Great writing with this line:
If you want part of your answer, turn to the mind:
first outside, then inside, as we shape the lens.
Great description of the disease.
D
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, D. I appreciate you giving it your time and attention. It?s definitely not an easy thing to live with, but it?s getting better. Writing it helps. I hope you have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is an excellent free verse detailing in stunning imagery and description the horrors of this type of disorder. The analogy with the fish is deeply poignant, the gasping for air as though on a hook, the grasping for life with no physical strength remaining. Yet still there is some glimmer of optimism in the soul, constrained though it is within 'the twisting coercion of the disorder.' Gradually, with time and care, the light may still shine through. Such weighty words and powerful sentiments! I love it but just feel, ultimately, that it needed to be shorter and more refined, no matter how hard that might be, because, otherwise, you are at risk of lessening the impact you've worked so hard to achieve and losing the reader. I would really like to read this again and be able to give it a 6* Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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This is an excellent free verse detailing in stunning imagery and description the horrors of this type of disorder. The analogy with the fish is deeply poignant, the gasping for air as though on a hook, the grasping for life with no physical strength remaining. Yet still there is some glimmer of optimism in the soul, constrained though it is within 'the twisting coercion of the disorder.' Gradually, with time and care, the light may still shine through. Such weighty words and powerful sentiments! I love it but just feel, ultimately, that it needed to be shorter and more refined, no matter how hard that might be, because, otherwise, you are at risk of lessening the impact you've worked so hard to achieve and losing the reader. I would really like to read this again and be able to give it a 6* Take care Debbie
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thank you very much. I know it?s on the longer side, but part of that was to make sure the description of the experience was complete. I might trim down some. Thank you very much for your time and attention. I appreciate it immensely.
Comment from lucky linda
Life with Ed sounds like a bare existence. I am unfamiliar with the term; however, your description leaves no doubt as to the depths of your despair. I hear you and hope my rocks fall gentle around you.
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Life with Ed sounds like a bare existence. I am unfamiliar with the term; however, your description leaves no doubt as to the depths of your despair. I hear you and hope my rocks fall gentle around you.
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thank you very much. I?m in recovery for anorexia nervosa and was trying to describe it the best I could. I really appreciate your time and attention. Thank you.
