One Man's Calling
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Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. You also ended with a good hook with Ben's unknown nemesis. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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This is an excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. You also ended with a good hook with Ben's unknown nemesis. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
No stock in the corrals would be something to inquire about.
Seems Livvy valued Ben's opinion of her hubby to be, even delayed her wedding day until she got Ben's approval.
The ending seems a bit of a throw in as to why the saloon bouncer decided to pursue an obvious non-threat. Perhaps more details about that matter are yet to follow?
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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No stock in the corrals would be something to inquire about.
Seems Livvy valued Ben's opinion of her hubby to be, even delayed her wedding day until she got Ben's approval.
The ending seems a bit of a throw in as to why the saloon bouncer decided to pursue an obvious non-threat. Perhaps more details about that matter are yet to follow?
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Demone is a continuing presence. I didn't want readers to forget about him. Maybe a little more here.
Thank you for the review.
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent chapter, very readable. Ben has a great desire to do God's will and His work and almost has a John the Baptist quality about him; pointing quietly to his Master, and influncing men to want to know Him. The enemy is however lurking nearby. He won't prevail over a man anointed by God.
Wendy
Typo: "much as a hen might sensing a king snake in the house." ("sense" or "be sensing")
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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An excellent chapter, very readable. Ben has a great desire to do God's will and His work and almost has a John the Baptist quality about him; pointing quietly to his Master, and influncing men to want to know Him. The enemy is however lurking nearby. He won't prevail over a man anointed by God.
Wendy
Typo: "much as a hen might sensing a king snake in the house." ("sense" or "be sensing")
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Thank you for your great review. (and for the catch)
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Livvy understood that no woman could hold Ben, unless God picked her. It's good that she understood this and picked a good a good man for herself. Ben seems to be closing in on Demone.
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Livvy understood that no woman could hold Ben, unless God picked her. It's good that she understood this and picked a good a good man for herself. Ben seems to be closing in on Demone.
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Afraid there's a ways to go yet.
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I had hoped there was a lot more. Ben is interesting.
Comment from Jay Squires
You do well with the character, Ben. He grows in stature to the extent that you do not have him talk. I think he fills a real need in the reader, who would like to be Godly and quietly imposing, but secretly knows he can't ... and therefore lives through the character of Ben.
Livvy giggled with excitement [No punctuation at the end.]
I like the heck out of your writing, Wayne.
Jay
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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You do well with the character, Ben. He grows in stature to the extent that you do not have him talk. I think he fills a real need in the reader, who would like to be Godly and quietly imposing, but secretly knows he can't ... and therefore lives through the character of Ben.
Livvy giggled with excitement [No punctuation at the end.]
I like the heck out of your writing, Wayne.
Jay
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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smiling big here
Thank you!
You nailed it! 'I' want to be Ben!
Thank you for the review.
Comment from lyenochka
I guess there will be a climactic showdown when Demone meets Ben.
Glad that Livvy and her family were happy to see Ben and introduce him to her fiance. Ben's approval meant a lot to them.
Livvie finally slowed her chatter. (Livvy) One spelling would be best
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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I guess there will be a climactic showdown when Demone meets Ben.
Glad that Livvy and her family were happy to see Ben and introduce him to her fiance. Ben's approval meant a lot to them.
Livvie finally slowed her chatter. (Livvy) One spelling would be best
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Oops. Thank you! (Livvy)
And thank you for your review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well Ben approves of William for Livvy and so does her Mother so I suppose that is a go. Watch out, Ben's nemesis is at hand. I am enjoying your story about Ben Parson, Wayne. We need some men like him in this world today!
It was really bad back then, but it is in this day and age as well. Things never change only the times I suppose. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Well Ben approves of William for Livvy and so does her Mother so I suppose that is a go. Watch out, Ben's nemesis is at hand. I am enjoying your story about Ben Parson, Wayne. We need some men like him in this world today!
It was really bad back then, but it is in this day and age as well. Things never change only the times I suppose. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
And thank you immensely for the six stars!
Comment from Jim Wile
Excellent, Wayne. People certainly have Ben's number. A Christ-like figure, he just has that charisma and an aura about him that people either consciously or subconsciously know that he is a truly good person. Even his nemesis senses that about him. I loved how you brought him in at the end as a foreshadowing of the eventual showdown. This is skillfully written and leading us slowly toward a thrilling climax. Jim
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"The Lake City plan was that Ben would harness train them for room and board" (harness and train)
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Excellent, Wayne. People certainly have Ben's number. A Christ-like figure, he just has that charisma and an aura about him that people either consciously or subconsciously know that he is a truly good person. Even his nemesis senses that about him. I loved how you brought him in at the end as a foreshadowing of the eventual showdown. This is skillfully written and leading us slowly toward a thrilling climax. Jim
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"The Lake City plan was that Ben would harness train them for room and board" (harness and train)
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Harness train - train to the harness. Maybe I should hyphenate it.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Still no meeting between Ben and his nemesis but the latter is getting very edgy and tension is building. Meanwhile, Ben continues to be an all-round good guy, loved by everyone. The story, as ever, reads well with good dialogue and pace and you feel more action is around the corner. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Still no meeting between Ben and his nemesis but the latter is getting very edgy and tension is building. Meanwhile, Ben continues to be an all-round good guy, loved by everyone. The story, as ever, reads well with good dialogue and pace and you feel more action is around the corner. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm sure Ben was pleased to find himself amoung friends. It seems as if his reputation and proceeded him to this place. Damone Lovelace will be his next challenge. He seems like an evil man. I'll be looking forward to seeing where this episode will go.
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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I'm sure Ben was pleased to find himself amoung friends. It seems as if his reputation and proceeded him to this place. Damone Lovelace will be his next challenge. He seems like an evil man. I'll be looking forward to seeing where this episode will go.
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.