Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

You describe the sweetest, most delicious part of young love, nesting in one's first home together. You don't need much. You just need love. And a bed and table for two. Great love poem.

 Comment Written 06-May-2023

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reply by the author on 06-May-2023

Thank you very much for your time and kind review. Have a wonderful day.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Yes, indeed, Marival, what is Love poem? You have nailed it haven't you with this beautiful suite of tanka? At least I think you have. All the best of luck, amiga mia. Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 06-May-2023

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reply by the author on 06-May-2023

Thank you very much for your time and kind review. Have a wonderful day.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Jumbo J

Exceptional

Hi Gypsy Queen,
might I dare call this beautiful piece of writing a contrapuntal, rather than three, or a trio of Tanka's?

No matter what it's called, this is stunning. I love the way your first verse takes you to the mood as you set the scene. Those magic times when nature conjures up the perfect weather for snuggling, kissing and loving.

If I could, or if I even should... may I?
That covers your cinnamon
and sugared skin
enticing my need to taste.

The two taste's???
The 'my' bring it to a personal narrative.
Just a thought?

No matter I loved reading this, imaging this.

All the very best in this contest... beautifully composed and presented.

With our thoughts we create...
the food of life.

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 06-May-2023

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reply by the author on 06-May-2023

Thank you, James. I edited that line and it does sound better. It's always a pleasure to receive and read your detailed and insightful reviews, I'm very grateful for the exceptional six stars review.

Gypsy
"With our thoughts we create yummy treats" - inspired by James (JumboJ)

reply by Jumbo J on 06-May-2023

You know I read your reply... and still ended up at yummy treats.
I went back and read it again, and yes, you guessed it, it yummy treats for me, in whichever form they may come.

reply by the author on 06-May-2023

I'm sorry, James, I didn't ask you for permission to write your quote. I was trying to be funny. I tried to deleted but I can't :/

reply by Jumbo J on 06-May-2023

Please do not apologise sweet lady... you did it right... and really, they are only words to which I attached me ending thought... much the same as you. I thank you for thinking of it, but not necessary... I think we 'get' each other very well... and besides, I love humour!

Comment from Julie Lau

Excellent

This poem is so romantic, and must summon up many a memory from its readers, most of us having similar memories of that heady early time in one's marriage. And extra-well-done to have expressed this all within the confines of the tanka.

 Comment Written 05-May-2023

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reply by the author on 05-May-2023

Thank you very much, Julie. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Janel Mock

Excellent

I love this and I pictured myself in this moment with my love. I am ready for the day this moment comes for us. To just lay there and enjoy each other all day with no one around. Our home is not empty, but thats okay. :) Thank you for sharing!
~Janel

 Comment Written 05-May-2023

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reply by the author on 05-May-2023

Thank you very much, Janet. ;)

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Once again, you tantalized our senses with the descriptions of this passionate, yet innocent love. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-May-2023

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reply by the author on 04-May-2023

Barbara,
Thank you for the good luck wish, you are very kind. I appreciate your review and positive feedback.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Mike Stevens

Excellent

Another fine boem, Gypsy....I don't get in, 'Lick for quality control," what do you mean? No, a nasty line in a racy poem that triggered distant memories!

 Comment Written 04-May-2023

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reply by the author on 04-May-2023

It was a joke but I am going to rewrite this poem, I don't like how it came out.

Thank you for the review, you are very kind. I appreciate your review and positive feedback.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. This was indeed a great tanka and a wonderful love poem. I showed a great deal of love and devotion. Blessed Be n Hugs! Nice dual pictures.

 Comment Written 04-May-2023

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reply by the author on 04-May-2023

Thank you for the review, you are very kind. I appreciate your review and positive feedback. Blessed be.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 04-May-2023

Most welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

This Tanka is all at once sensual and romantic.
My favorite line is I lick for quality control, this tells us all we need to know about the night ahead with passion and fervor that will last until the wee morning hours.
Thanks for sharing the passionate way you feel when you have a clandestine moment with someone you love.
Jesse

 Comment Written 04-May-2023

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reply by the author on 04-May-2023

Thank you for the review, you are very kind. I appreciate your review and positive feedback.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I love that line, "I lick for quality control" now that's a thought, everybody has a quantity control department, this is a highly provocative poem, but as always, a quality poem, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 04-May-2023

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reply by the author on 04-May-2023

I am going to rewrite it, I don't like the way it came out. Most people are not getting the 'lick for quality control' it's a joke. Well, you got it.

Thank you for the review, you are very kind. I appreciate your review and positive feedback.

Gypsy hugs

reply by royowen on 04-May-2023

Well done