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Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Nintendo"NaPoWriMo 2023
6 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good post about games but it sounds more like a story than a poem.
I like the imagery and presentation.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Good post about games but it sounds more like a story than a poem.
I like the imagery and presentation.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 03-May-2023
Comment from shelley kaye
i'd call this a haibun (but that could be just me lol)
i liked the prose-verse and the senryu was very good
it all had good flow
one suggestion i have is maybe try a tealish background to blend with the background of the picture? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
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i'd call this a haibun (but that could be just me lol)
i liked the prose-verse and the senryu was very good
it all had good flow
one suggestion i have is maybe try a tealish background to blend with the background of the picture? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 02-May-2023
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This was an interesting Chapter, because I was surprised to learn some of this. I was a Nintendo kid. Your writing is interesting and compelling. There is one note I have: Not everyone is into videogames,
because, to some people, it seems lame.
(It what?) If videogames, than they seem lame. If you mean playing video games, than it is correct. Some people think playing video games is lame.
Your choice but the verb should agree with the noun. It's not clear this way.
I enjoyed reading your good Chapter, though. Best wishes!
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This was an interesting Chapter, because I was surprised to learn some of this. I was a Nintendo kid. Your writing is interesting and compelling. There is one note I have: Not everyone is into videogames,
because, to some people, it seems lame.
(It what?) If videogames, than they seem lame. If you mean playing video games, than it is correct. Some people think playing video games is lame.
Your choice but the verb should agree with the noun. It's not clear this way.
I enjoyed reading your good Chapter, though. Best wishes!
Comment Written 02-May-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I remember years ago we had Nintendo hand held games for Christmas in our house and it was addictive, I wasted many hours on it and so did the rest of my family. It was then I realised that it was unproductive and mind boggling and I have never touched a video game since, but as you say this name is synonymous with quality, I enjoyed your honest write Alicia, love Dolly x
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I remember years ago we had Nintendo hand held games for Christmas in our house and it was addictive, I wasted many hours on it and so did the rest of my family. It was then I realised that it was unproductive and mind boggling and I have never touched a video game since, but as you say this name is synonymous with quality, I enjoyed your honest write Alicia, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-May-2023
Comment from royowen
I didn't know Nintendo existed before the fall of the Ottoman Empire which about 1922, but it did come into prominence in recent times, but I must admit, I didn't know when. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
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I didn't know Nintendo existed before the fall of the Ottoman Empire which about 1922, but it did come into prominence in recent times, but I must admit, I didn't know when. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-May-2023
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for giving us that background information! I'm glad you researched Nintendo. I can't imagine that the company is really that old and I never really played any of their games. Great info!
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Thanks for giving us that background information! I'm glad you researched Nintendo. I can't imagine that the company is really that old and I never really played any of their games. Great info!
Comment Written 01-May-2023
