Ray's Dad
Contest entry4 total reviews
Comment from Cathy M
This was a heartfelt loving story about a father and son having closure. I did feel it was more micro and a little too sparse with descriptions that would have made me feel the love between the two, or even the hope of love. I feel if you enhance the storyline, give it more of a background and descriptions this will round out very nicely. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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This was a heartfelt loving story about a father and son having closure. I did feel it was more micro and a little too sparse with descriptions that would have made me feel the love between the two, or even the hope of love. I feel if you enhance the storyline, give it more of a background and descriptions this will round out very nicely. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry was interesting, Mystery Author.
I enjoyed reading it. You gave readers good info about
the family which allowed them to make inferences about
the story. It was great to see the positive relationship Ray
and his dad had.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Your contest entry was interesting, Mystery Author.
I enjoyed reading it. You gave readers good info about
the family which allowed them to make inferences about
the story. It was great to see the positive relationship Ray
and his dad had.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Although I have never experienced a supernatural appearance, there is part of me that believes it could happen. At any rate, your story about the Dad reappearing is a happy one and that would be a positive experience to be sure. If for no other reason that to reassure each other.
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Although I have never experienced a supernatural appearance, there is part of me that believes it could happen. At any rate, your story about the Dad reappearing is a happy one and that would be a positive experience to be sure. If for no other reason that to reassure each other.
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A spiritual write for the contest and you made me smile here with your humour. I wish you luck with the contest.
Just one suggestion for this line at the beginning:
(Ray (sees) a transparent ghost)
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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A spiritual write for the contest and you made me smile here with your humour. I wish you luck with the contest.
Just one suggestion for this line at the beginning:
(Ray (sees) a transparent ghost)
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thank you for your review and help! It is fixed.