Winter Chills
Cold weather is not always enjoyable. 5-7-52 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is simple and true. We are just passed Winter herd in the USA. Your few words told the story of Winter well, your poem is descriptive and created imagery. The image works well to support your work, also
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This is simple and true. We are just passed Winter herd in the USA. Your few words told the story of Winter well, your poem is descriptive and created imagery. The image works well to support your work, also
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I quite enjoyed this piece. All syllables are present and correct which is always nice.
The last line for me was jarring for me, though, which was a shame. It feels off given all the other description have the right form with 'ing' but bone crunch doesn't and it sits slightly off.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Hi there,
I quite enjoyed this piece. All syllables are present and correct which is always nice.
The last line for me was jarring for me, though, which was a shame. It feels off given all the other description have the right form with 'ing' but bone crunch doesn't and it sits slightly off.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thanks for your review. I've switched the last and first lines and I think it reads better.