An April Fool
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Flying Animals"NaPoWriMo 2023
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Comment from royowen
I think kindness should be a normal thing anyway, we share this planet with these creatures, the original plan was that we are the caretakers of this planet we inhabit,, but we've blown it, beautifully written Alicia, blessings Roy
I think kindness should be a normal thing anyway, we share this planet with these creatures, the original plan was that we are the caretakers of this planet we inhabit,, but we've blown it, beautifully written Alicia, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from Ricky1024
This was interesting as well as well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky
This was interesting as well as well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
And man can only fly with the aid of devices. Unless a very large flying animal swoops down and carries him off. Then he would be too terrified to enjoy the view.
That was a very interesting and informative poem. So many flying creatures I didn't know about.
And man can only fly with the aid of devices. Unless a very large flying animal swoops down and carries him off. Then he would be too terrified to enjoy the view.
That was a very interesting and informative poem. So many flying creatures I didn't know about.
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Good work! I'm just learning about Free Verse, Poetry. I just read the best tutorial. I have no more sixes, a misfortune I fail to understand each day. I imagine the flying animals are afraid of us too because, when we fly, we fly in metal, which could hurt them. I don't think I should let my mind get too free-versey.lol If they want free verse, oh they will get free verse! Joking I'm still learning. Best wishes! :)) Alex
Good work! I'm just learning about Free Verse, Poetry. I just read the best tutorial. I have no more sixes, a misfortune I fail to understand each day. I imagine the flying animals are afraid of us too because, when we fly, we fly in metal, which could hurt them. I don't think I should let my mind get too free-versey.lol If they want free verse, oh they will get free verse! Joking I'm still learning. Best wishes! :)) Alex
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I thought from the initial couple of lines that this would rhyme the way through but it didn't and it jarred a little as a result.
I think you could expand on this with a bit more on each animal.
All the best
GMG
Hi there,
I thought from the initial couple of lines that this would rhyme the way through but it didn't and it jarred a little as a result.
I think you could expand on this with a bit more on each animal.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from lyenochka
Yes, there are so many marvelous creatures all around us but we don't want to be swimming with the sharks! Lol. Thanks for sharing and listing the many forms of life around us.
Yes, there are so many marvelous creatures all around us but we don't want to be swimming with the sharks! Lol. Thanks for sharing and listing the many forms of life around us.
Comment Written 01-May-2023