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"The Gift of Life 2003"

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Comment from Mia Twysted
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A very touching story that reaches into the reader's heart. The3 steady and profound beat of the words walked you through with care and attention, knowing the painful hurt to come. Then suddenly, from death, there is life. A chance for a piece of the soul to go on and give to another. It is sad and yet, at the same time, inspiring.

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 01-May-2023
    I like this review especially when you talk about it being inspiring.
    I promise my son over 20 years ago when he was brain dead that no one would ever forget him.
    Thanks again Mia.
    Doctor Ricky
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I have registered for them to take whatever they like when I pass. If it help others, then in a way we are carrying on. Your son's terrible death has given others a chance at life. I'm sure he would be happy about that. And, I definitely believe you will meet again, we all will if God allows. Your poem brought tears to my eyes, I just wish there was a way that you could draw comfort, but Jay was your life and your greatest love, you son. We should never outlive our children. Sending warm hugs, and prayers, my friend. Sandra xx

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Why thank you ever so much Sandra .
    This all happened March 31st, 2003 at about 8:00 pm.
    The car was purposely driven into a telephone pole at about 100 miles an hour.
    ...
    After arriving at the scene with my wife Carolyn.
    (Whom would commit suicide November 23rd, 2003)
    Leaving me penniles and $100,000 in debt.
    Yes for not paying the bills for 10 years.
    I realized at the scene that it was quite serious.
    I didn't realize how serious until the fire truck pulled up. The one fireman covered my son.
    And cloaked him with a heavy green material.
    While the other one smashed the side of the Ford Mustangs car window.
    They pulled Jason out and put him on a gurney.
    Shortly later they used to jaws a life to remove Brian Cole the driver .
    He used to be a friend of Jason's.
    He was then diagnosed mentally ill on a drug called Effexor .
    I thought he was just unconscious.
    I knew soon with my soon lo to be Broken of Heart
    ...
    It was over 8:30 p.m.
    March 31st, 2003.
    When I called out Jason's name and he didn't respond to me .
    That was when I died.
    I'm a registered human donor in three hospitals in the state of Maryland.
    And three in the state of Pennsylvania.

    Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 29-Apr-2023
    You have visited hell a few times, haven't you? How sad that your wife then committed suicide. That must have been the final straw. I am so sorry, Ricky. Love and hugs. xxx
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    That was not the last stroll I've cheated at 14 times.
    I've been run over three times riding bicycles.
    Gotten an accident with a big motorcycle. Almost lost my right finger.
    Had a heart attack on the way to the hospital but the first bicycle accident it took 22 units to restore me.
    The last bicycle action it cost me an 18-in titanium rod in my right leg. My tibby was broken in half in my fibbean five places.
    December 1st 2006 5 days before my dead weighs 54th birthday I committed suicide.
    7-in serrated knife directly into my chest watching by Guinea -T turn Crimsom Red.
    20 minutes waiting to die?
    In order to be with my son.
    I stopped bleeding.
    I went back and picked up the knife and stabbed myself in the chest.
    Yes, a second time deeper.
    This time hitting the heart valve and bleeding internally.
    I had not a clue and felt not a thing.
    Again, I went back into my bedroom to wait to be with my son.
    Again, I didn't die.
    Upset now. I picked up the the knife right to the side of my neck
    (What the heck ?)
    Yes, three times.
    Praying to God. I'd hit the juggler and bleed out within a second.
    I missed.
    Now 1 hour into the "Triple Suicide Dance"
    I figured do what most people do and take a bottle of pills.
    I was on Depakote for seizures and depression.
    Yes, so I down the whole bottle but that won't kill me either!
    Damn it Janet!
    ...
    That was when my ex-girlfriend Nancy called.
    We had just broke up the night before.
    She said she was coming over to the house!
    Yes, because she didn't like my tone of voice.
    So my dear Poet.
    I had no choice but to call 9-11.
    Sadly putting an end to my fun .
    It would have been over if I had a gun
    ...
    The different police officers.
    (One was canine)
    To search my house for the louse!
    And then paramedics and even the surgeon!
    Ask the same damn question!
    "Who did this to you?"
    They didn't believe that I did it to myself.
    And I was hoping for the best on my quest death.
    They called my family and the Ocean County violent crime scene taped off my house!
    Somebody stated I had a less than 5% chance to survive.
    I laugh at it today.
    ...
    Doing that car accident.
    My son told my youngest 17-year-old daughter Dana.
    Yes, to ride with my other daughter Kyle Erin Harbach Drum.
    Not only did my son Jason save four people but he gave me a going away present.
    ...
    Two years after my daughter Dana got out of jail for dealing heroin and using it herself.
    She did the time so her boyfriend.
    (who had three first degrees)
    Yes, wouldn't do 20 .
    After coming home....
    She got pregnant with Alexander.
    You see, my Son?
    My Only Son Jason.
    Yes, he knew it all and I knew nothing until the very end.
    He knew what I would do.
    But You see for me the pain was still too great.
    Now even though he gave me my grandson Alexander.
    Because Dana got pregnant within weeks after getting out of jail. and coming home.
    You got a job at Wendy's and that's where she met Alex's father Carlos.
    The moral of the story?
    And all its detail and in all its glory.
    If you know somebody severely depressed, possibly contemplating suicide?
    Please call the National Suicide hotline at 988.
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Comment from country ranch writer
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A friend of mine was coming home for Utah and had an wreck and he was but my a drunk driver he was a king hauk truck driver. The man cared less about it here in the riad and plowed into my friend as he came across the median into his lane hitting him head on. He died shortly hours after reaching the hospital. He was a organ donor and when ge passed they saved many others at least eight that same night.Thefrunk driver didn't get a scary on him! How I don't know. Maybe the Lird feels sorry for drunks and fools I don't know.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
    Thanks for your review and sorry to hear about your friend's accident.
    Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from royowen
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I heard the other day that a dear friend, and neighbour was given eight months to live, and that was eight months ago, he's still alive, even to prove those hated doctors wrong, but I'll go and render comfort, beautifully written, my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
    Miracles can come true you just need to believe.
    Thanks,
    Doctor Ricky
Comment from Ben Colder
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Truly, I understand this write and what this man is going through. I lost my second son to cancer, my wife died three months later. Talking about feeling alone, had it not knowing both was in Heaven, not sure I could have made it. I found strength in Christ, a well we can all drink from. I see nothing wrong with this write and pray God's blessings your way.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023
    Thanks for sharing your review with me and have a pleasant day.
    Doctor Ricky
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing your story with us.

I know even below you're in Heaven this day (I doubt 'below' belongs in this line.)

Jay, Oh how I miss you so ad I now must pray. (and)

fortunately, this tis the way it's got to be. (is)

Weather to Be or Not to Be for me. (Whether)

Umbilical fluids (cerebrospinal fluid?)

These are your Musical .Gifts. (not sure the period is in front of 'Gifts')

My only son Jason purposely wrote as a passenger into a telephone pole at 100 mph. (road)

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023
    Thank you for sharing your review with me and have a pleasant morning.
    Doctor Ricky
Comment from papa55mike
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It's hard to imagine the things he's done in heaven, walking on the golden streets, chatting with angels, and seeing the golden city. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!

Have a great day, and Gopd bless.
mike

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023
    Thanks for sharing your review with me and have a pleasant morning.
    Doctor Ricky