Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Battle of All Hallows"A compilation of poems
7 total reviews
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Congratulations my friend. This is a wonderful Halloween spring post..
I love the little monsters, how they shrink back into the den. That is adorable.
That's a definite winner. Great job congratulations again.
Kerry
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Congratulations my friend. This is a wonderful Halloween spring post..
I love the little monsters, how they shrink back into the den. That is adorable.
That's a definite winner. Great job congratulations again.
Kerry
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thank you Carrie so much that's kind of you. I appreciate your comment oh yeah I'm glad you'd like it. I wasn't sure how to incorporated Halloween with springly. Don't normally go together so I figured well since they don't go together. Let's have a battle so thank you for your warm congratulations I appreciated have a great evening!
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Lol I know me too. I planned I don't know the whole thing, mine just went astray. It was terrible mine lol
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a magical poem for this contest and I enjoyed your clever use of words, your end rhymes and metre, I reckon this is a definite winner for the contest, I wish you luck, a pleasure to read, I love those pumpkin soldiers! Ha ha ha, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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This is a magical poem for this contest and I enjoyed your clever use of words, your end rhymes and metre, I reckon this is a definite winner for the contest, I wish you luck, a pleasure to read, I love those pumpkin soldiers! Ha ha ha, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you dolly im glad you liked it I hope it does well too. Thank you for your kind words I appreciate it. I'm always in your work too lovely never fails thank youl!
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You will get my vote on this one, good luck x
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Thank you so much!
Comment from pome lover
I'm sorry, but I fear I didn't get most of your descriptions, such as a morning glory loudly shivering? And you might want to change the spelling to herald (line two) and Draculean, line 5.
I think I get your general meaning, but "trumpet vines snake the eyes of pumpkin soldiers'? what does that mean? and how does a witch's breath reap renewal? and of what? I guess you're claiming poetic license, which is fine, if it makes sense. And I'm sure it does to you.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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I'm sorry, but I fear I didn't get most of your descriptions, such as a morning glory loudly shivering? And you might want to change the spelling to herald (line two) and Draculean, line 5.
I think I get your general meaning, but "trumpet vines snake the eyes of pumpkin soldiers'? what does that mean? and how does a witch's breath reap renewal? and of what? I guess you're claiming poetic license, which is fine, if it makes sense. And I'm sure it does to you.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your review for your comments. I appreciate your questions. I like to pull out words that mean opposite of each other....smash them together create opposition within itself. As if to say plants have feelings that this particular fine was shaking and scared but continued moving on growing. As the battle for summer was about to begin. The contest was to have halloween in spring so I propose a battle between the two. The expression or A-line which says trumpet buys snake the eyes of pumpkin soldiers. It's the visual I have of pumpkins in the field where the vines are growing quickly and running through the carved eyes of the pumpkins. They are by defeating halloween and having summer come after all. The witches are magical and bad witches tend to suck out life and energy and the Spring is full of life and energy so with her breath she. Sucked out and reaped the springs renewal. With the intention of crippling spring so that summer could not come and the pumpkin army of fall and halloween could win the battle. I know it's kind of fantastical and everything but I did what I could with the subject matter provided. However I take your comments to heart and will attempt to make it a little more clear in this poem. Thank you very much for your feedback always appreciated by me. I hope you have a great day!
Comment from Nicki Nance
You left no monster disregarded - vampires, wolves, witches, snakes, What more could an army of pumpkins ask for? This is brilliantly written. You breathed life into every character and made inanimate objects into characters. Great read!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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You left no monster disregarded - vampires, wolves, witches, snakes, What more could an army of pumpkins ask for? This is brilliantly written. You breathed life into every character and made inanimate objects into characters. Great read!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much Nikki. I'm honored by your response and I'm pleasing happy with your decided rating. Oh thank you for that and for your comments and time always grateful!! I'm glad you liked it had a little fun with it!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The last sentence is wonderful to read. ~summer tiptoes in~
I have never seen a spring Halloween. Would they have this holiday turned around on their calendar? The image does look like fall; the sentence does pertain to spring~spring morning glory loudly shivers as quietly vining~~
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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The last sentence is wonderful to read. ~summer tiptoes in~
I have never seen a spring Halloween. Would they have this holiday turned around on their calendar? The image does look like fall; the sentence does pertain to spring~spring morning glory loudly shivers as quietly vining~~
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Yes this is a funny little contest to enter. We wanted to talk about Halloween and Spring in the same breath so I came up with the battle instead. I'm glad you enjoyed this and thank you for your kind review every time always appreciative! Have a great day!
Comment from royowen
An interesting piece, I've written some corrections, assuming these adjustments is what you meant to say, otherwise your work made little sense, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : (Quitely) vining. Quietly? 2: (Harold) the winter to come. Herald?
3: (raping) renewal, Reaping? 4: (Daring) buds, darling?
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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An interesting piece, I've written some corrections, assuming these adjustments is what you meant to say, otherwise your work made little sense, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : (Quitely) vining. Quietly? 2: (Harold) the winter to come. Herald?
3: (raping) renewal, Reaping? 4: (Daring) buds, darling?
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thank you Roy yes I did make the changes it a little bit currently on the old post it there but thank you again for your nice to preview and for your fabulous comments and for your time and suggestions always valuable to me. Thank you again right have a great day!
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Well done
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow that's quite a march on Spring by the Halloween army. This verse is full of imagery and imagination with a sunning image completing the presentation. I think you had fun here! Rather enjoyed the line: spirits shoot forth crystalline fear tendrils. Did you mean 'herald' in the second line? Thanks for sharing and good luck, Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Wow that's quite a march on Spring by the Halloween army. This verse is full of imagery and imagination with a sunning image completing the presentation. I think you had fun here! Rather enjoyed the line: spirits shoot forth crystalline fear tendrils. Did you mean 'herald' in the second line? Thanks for sharing and good luck, Debbie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Lol. .. Yes you're exactly right harold's got nothing to do much l o l. Thank you so much l o l. I appreciate your kind words and for your review. Thank you for having a look and offering your thoughts and in the origin of course also valuable thank you Debbie we have a great day!
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I should have said 'stunning' (it's getting late here in the UK!) Good luck!
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Ty...lol
