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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Grateful Songbird "NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
13 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Jessica,
thank you for participating in the Japanese poetry club event. Great Mondo poem entry with a good connection between lines and a form. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Hello, Jessica,
thank you for participating in the Japanese poetry club event. Great Mondo poem entry with a good connection between lines and a form. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Gypsy!
Comment from mermaids
I like the image in your words of the songbirds singing to their shelter. A feeling of peace and comfort comes through your words. I like how your first verse is a question and then you answer the question in the second verse. Your words also take the reader out into the natural world.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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I like the image in your words of the songbirds singing to their shelter. A feeling of peace and comfort comes through your words. I like how your first verse is a question and then you answer the question in the second verse. Your words also take the reader out into the natural world.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much I appreciate that!
Comment from Eleri
This is an unusual form which I had not come across before. The explanation really helps therefore. I loved the imagery in the poem and the use of words beginning with 's' - the poem really conjures up a picture of birds in my mind.
Eleri
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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This is an unusual form which I had not come across before. The explanation really helps therefore. I loved the imagery in the poem and the use of words beginning with 's' - the poem really conjures up a picture of birds in my mind.
Eleri
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you, I truly appreciate your review!
Jessica
Comment from Jim Wile
Beautiful, Jess. A simple poem with a simple message. I always thought they were singing to attract each other or just because they liked to sing, but actually they're thanking their sheltering trees! Who knew?
This was beautifully-rendered too with a well-chosen font and picture. Great job! Jim
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Beautiful, Jess. A simple poem with a simple message. I always thought they were singing to attract each other or just because they liked to sing, but actually they're thanking their sheltering trees! Who knew?
This was beautifully-rendered too with a well-chosen font and picture. Great job! Jim
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Many thanks, Jim!
Jess
Comment from Ginda Simpson
How lovely to see the birdsong that we hear as a melody of gratitude on their part. You have created a lovely word picture of time and place, but of feeling too. Really sweet.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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How lovely to see the birdsong that we hear as a melody of gratitude on their part. You have created a lovely word picture of time and place, but of feeling too. Really sweet.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Ginda! Xoxo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I just figured the songbird was happy and singing because they are happy. My favorite time of day is sitting outside very early and listening to Mother Nature wake up. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I just figured the songbird was happy and singing because they are happy. My favorite time of day is sitting outside very early and listening to Mother Nature wake up. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Mother Nature waking up- I love that, Barbara. I love that time of day as well, I try to enjoy it as much as I can.. it's a peaceful kickoff! Thanks so much for reviewing. Xo
Jessica
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
This is absolutely lovely and is a part of the beautiful poetry we have come to expect from you here! Also something I didn't know before. Thank you for this with us!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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This is absolutely lovely and is a part of the beautiful poetry we have come to expect from you here! Also something I didn't know before. Thank you for this with us!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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My Debi! Thank you!! I've been slammed this week but I'm gonna check in with you tomorrow to catch up, miss you!
Xo
Comment from Cherish Adams
I love this poem. I will have to look up Mondo poetic form. It's a new one to me, most of them are... This is thought provoking. I love that too. Thank you for writing and sharing. Cherish
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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I love this poem. I will have to look up Mondo poetic form. It's a new one to me, most of them are... This is thought provoking. I love that too. Thank you for writing and sharing. Cherish
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Cherish! I'm with you on that... I hadn?t heard of most - or any, of the Japanese forms before joining the site in February. It's been an education! Haha, This was my first attempt at a mondo poem- I believe it's actually meant to be written by two poets...but for the purpose of this club?s prompt, we just answered our own questions! haha, thank you for your kind words and feedback!!
Jessica
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, I think birds are God's avian heralds, and trees that clap their hands in their wariness of their maker are the havens for those heralds, beautifully written friend Jessica, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Oh yes, I think birds are God's avian heralds, and trees that clap their hands in their wariness of their maker are the havens for those heralds, beautifully written friend Jessica, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from K.I. Betancur
Excellent work! Love this.
The font you selected, on top of the background color, just soaks in the idea of this being a Yamato-e.
Thank you for writing!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Excellent work! Love this.
The font you selected, on top of the background color, just soaks in the idea of this being a Yamato-e.
Thank you for writing!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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I appreciate that so much! Thank you