Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

A strong and important message to the tobacco industry "Cancer Predators," this post aims to point a finger of contempt at what they have caused and how blindly they continue selling their deadly products all in the interests of money and capitalism. The accusations are unrelenting and pack quite a punch. And, as a result I so wanted to award this post 5 stars but it needs some editing, Ricky. In the first para the lines need breaking up with punctuation to make this more readable. Ernie and "mess" or "mass"? 'choke' instead of 'choak' 'shroud' instead of 'should' Your compelling words otherwise tend to get lost if too error-strewn It flows so much better after that and there are some potent, evocative phrases like "Death by self-consumption." A really good and impressive rant. Thanks for sharing, Debbie

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023

thanks for your review Debbie.
Right after you read this this was edited.
Barbara Wilkie a novelist and it's my work is it immediately as it is on the writing site.
Thanks,
Note: I so much never take Stars away for grammar issues.
(There Are Young writers learning here)
I base my five and six star reviews on Objective and Adjective Contents.
Theme, flow, and imagery.
Doctor Ricky 1024
"Still Preaching to the Choir here Fanstory"

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Yep, and the tobacco companies knew smoking was addictive and took measures to increase the addictiveness. Thank you for sharing.

Of course they want you to buy their tobacco products! (comma after 'course)

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023

Thanks Barbara and when we think about it?
The best things in the world are free!
Fresh air and fresh water.
So, why should we pollute our bodies?
Ricky