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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
An imaginative and image-filled account using asteroid and meteorite terminology to echo emotions and heartbreak? The heart represents the soul of this verse and the battle to which it has been subjected? There are some small edits: (an) asteroid; "my lower right (held?) Well done for the twist at the end. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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An imaginative and image-filled account using asteroid and meteorite terminology to echo emotions and heartbreak? The heart represents the soul of this verse and the battle to which it has been subjected? There are some small edits: (an) asteroid; "my lower right (held?) Well done for the twist at the end. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Why thanks for this and I'm so happy you enjoyed it.
And have a blessed day Doctor Ricky
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
While my Right tried but lost the fight. (comma after 'Right')
Right help on tight but too, was broken way back in 19 22. (Really 1922, if so then there shouldn't be a space between 19 & 22)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
While my Right tried but lost the fight. (comma after 'Right')
Right help on tight but too, was broken way back in 19 22. (Really 1922, if so then there shouldn't be a space between 19 & 22)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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I just did the same with this one also.
I've been playing too many games of Chess instead of writing!
And, my mind is being abused!
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