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The earth is covered in a carpet of orange

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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Your poem meets the requirements. You have written the word autumn, which creates a nature poem. The syllables are counted, there are no questions. Gorgeous poem.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much 🙂
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Those vibrant colours of Autumn are alive and kicking inside your Haiku here and I wish you luck with the contest, a fine entry filled with ambient colour, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
    Thank you Dolly 🙂
Comment from Eternal Muse
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Beautiful. I was born in autumn, it's my favorite time of the year. The autumn foliage is very inspiring.

Loved your imagery, visuals and your fantastic presentation. Great choice of an artwork. Good luck in the contest, it should do very well.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much 🙂
Comment from Sugarray77
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Good evening! I enjoyed reading this ode to Autumn. You did an excellent job of capturing the glory of the season and relaying it in a meaningful way. Well done and good luck in the contest!!

Melissa

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much 🙂
Comment from K.I. Betancur
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I would say the black background gives too much of an "ominous" feeling. I'd definitely go for something lighter, that contrasts with keeping the orange text as well.

I see nothing wrong with your choice and weaving of words though.

Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
    Thanks
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Lovely presentation. It seems a few entries for this contest have opted for art imagery to convey autumn's splendour.

WARNING: I think you have too many syllables in your middle line - bet get that fixed before this goes to the vote.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
    Thank you
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
    Orange can be either a one or two syllable word isn?t it if it is it?s seven syllables in my middle line ?
reply by kiwisteveh on 15-Apr-2023
    Never heard it as one syllable, but maybe?! Sorry to sow the seed of doubt. Have you checked an online syllable counter... just Google 'How many syllables in orange?'
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
    In most dialects, orange is pronounced with two syllables. But in certain dialects of North American English, the vowel of the second syllable is deleted and the word is pronounced as one syllable. In such dialects, the two forms are generally allophonic. I?m not sure if that means I can use it as one syllable .
reply by kiwisteveh on 15-Apr-2023
    Up to you I think. This contest is voted on by other FS members. before it gets that far it is run by a committee to make sure rules have been followed. The worst that can happen is that the committee contacts you to say your entry doesn't mee the rules. I think you then get a chance to fix it...
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
    Thanks