haiku (fragile memories)
Haiku33 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I wanted to congratulate you on this win. The image is stunning with the 'fragility' and elegance of the words fittingly perfect. The alliteration (which I always love) gave the whole limited form verse depth and cohesion. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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I wanted to congratulate you on this win. The image is stunning with the 'fragility' and elegance of the words fittingly perfect. The alliteration (which I always love) gave the whole limited form verse depth and cohesion. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thanks, Debbie and sorry for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Congratulations on the haiku contest win Steve and for this emotional write about 'Fragile memories'. This is your second one on this topic I have read this morning, I hope all is well with you and yours.
A beautiful presentation.
Valda
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023
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Congratulations on the haiku contest win Steve and for this emotional write about 'Fragile memories'. This is your second one on this topic I have read this morning, I hope all is well with you and yours.
A beautiful presentation.
Valda
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023
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Hi, Valda. Thanks for the kind review and yes, it was good to get a win under my belt! I can certainly do with the money right now!
Steve
Comment from Julie Lau
Congratulations, Steve, on winning the haiku contest. It was well deserved, and the accompanying image is amazing! ....................................................................... Julie L
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Congratulations, Steve, on winning the haiku contest. It was well deserved, and the accompanying image is amazing! ....................................................................... Julie L
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Julie.
Steve
Comment from mrsmajor
I don't write these very often, but I do know a excellent one when I see it...Picture, message all beautifully done, Steve, Congratulations on the win...Well deserved...Hugs
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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I don't write these very often, but I do know a excellent one when I see it...Picture, message all beautifully done, Steve, Congratulations on the win...Well deserved...Hugs
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Hi, Victoria. I don't do a lot of haiku either, but this one just came out well. I have a new recipe to try out for the tea party - Date Loaf. Youm!
Steve
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Well you did a wonderful job on this
one...
hmmmmm, Date Loaf, sounds good
to me, especially with tea...
looking forward to sipping tea
and having a piece of cake...or
2 pieces...Take Care my friend..
Hugs!
Victoria
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Yeah, it's an old-fashioned recipe but simply delicious. I made one last week, but then we had the plumbers here and they gobbled up most of it for their smoko. I'll have to make another one just for us!
Steve
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No fooling around, Steve, I'll
be looking forward to it!!!
Victoria
Comment from MissMerri
I read this the other day but intended to review it when I could do so from my computer instead of my phone. Then I forgot so here I am on the phone again. I loved this and admired the way you put the satori line first, as we learned to do from some of our esteemed teachers. It is unusual and brave and certainly effective. In this case, it makes a most beautiful haiku. Congratulations for winning first place. A great choice this was.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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I read this the other day but intended to review it when I could do so from my computer instead of my phone. Then I forgot so here I am on the phone again. I loved this and admired the way you put the satori line first, as we learned to do from some of our esteemed teachers. It is unusual and brave and certainly effective. In this case, it makes a most beautiful haiku. Congratulations for winning first place. A great choice this was.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Adonna, thanks for the thoughtful words and the extra star - much appreciated.
As for the placement of the satori - that was a bit of a toss-up. I believe I had lines 1&3 the other way around at first. That would have been OK too, I think, but my gut prompted me to put that idea of the fragile memory out there first before linking it to the moth.
I'm just happy the committee agreed with that!
Steve
Comment from karenina
Congratulations on your win. This is stunningly expressed and presented.
I am reminded of the many times my own memories rose madly to beat wings against the light... Knowing there was so much more than mere blackness in grief.
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Congratulations on your win. This is stunningly expressed and presented.
I am reminded of the many times my own memories rose madly to beat wings against the light... Knowing there was so much more than mere blackness in grief.
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Karenina, for this lovely response to my haiku. Perhaps especially as we get older we experience these sudden flashbacks which often come out of nowhere - some happy, some sad, some simply unexpected.
Steve
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Loved it... Great to read you (or anyone!) again, Steve!
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks to the Committee.
Steve
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, a beautiful contrast of the white moth fluttering into the dark night. Great metaphor of those flickering memories from the darkness of the past which is unreachable in the present. Lovely use of alliteration, too! I think this could be the winner!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Ah, a beautiful contrast of the white moth fluttering into the dark night. Great metaphor of those flickering memories from the darkness of the past which is unreachable in the present. Lovely use of alliteration, too! I think this could be the winner!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thanks again. I'm not a great one for haiku, but I did like how this one turned out.
Steve
Comment from Kerry Foley
This is a gorgeous haiku, my friend.
Perfect picture to accompany it.
All in all great presentation.
Good luck to you!
-Kerry
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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This is a gorgeous haiku, my friend.
Perfect picture to accompany it.
All in all great presentation.
Good luck to you!
-Kerry
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Many thanks, Kerry - glad you enjoyed.
steve
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you're welcome
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welcome
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welcome
Comment from Gina Schneller
Hello there. Very nicely written. Not hard to paint a picture for the reader in such few words. I also love the picture you chose too! ~ Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us all! ~ Best of luck in your writing journey! :)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Hello there. Very nicely written. Not hard to paint a picture for the reader in such few words. I also love the picture you chose too! ~ Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us all! ~ Best of luck in your writing journey! :)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Gina.
A winner as it turns out!
Steve