Death
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Comment from Paul McFarland
Congratulations on your second place finish, Darla. Your meter is improving. Your poem is full of good advice for someone who has lost a loved one.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Congratulations on your second place finish, Darla. Your meter is improving. Your poem is full of good advice for someone who has lost a loved one.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet , you now have 3 votes!
My mamma died suddenly so I didn't get time to prepare.
Just 4 days before we had an argument and we were still not talking... that made her passing more painful.
Pa came back to Italy to live with me ( we sold the villa in Spain where my parents had been living for the last 16 years).
I wanted to be there for my father at least , instead he died while I was out doing some shopping for the evening meal.
The doctor had made a visit earlier that day and told us that pa s cold was not serious and with meds he would recover, instead less than an hour later he passed away.
Hence , I missed out a second time( sigh)
Pa s passing was harder because I had to deal with it alone.
When my mother left us we had each other s support.
Eight months after his death , I started to think in rhyme and I wrote my first ever poem.
I find fanstory and subscribed , poetry helped me move on.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Ciao poet , you now have 3 votes!
My mamma died suddenly so I didn't get time to prepare.
Just 4 days before we had an argument and we were still not talking... that made her passing more painful.
Pa came back to Italy to live with me ( we sold the villa in Spain where my parents had been living for the last 16 years).
I wanted to be there for my father at least , instead he died while I was out doing some shopping for the evening meal.
The doctor had made a visit earlier that day and told us that pa s cold was not serious and with meds he would recover, instead less than an hour later he passed away.
Hence , I missed out a second time( sigh)
Pa s passing was harder because I had to deal with it alone.
When my mother left us we had each other s support.
Eight months after his death , I started to think in rhyme and I wrote my first ever poem.
I find fanstory and subscribed , poetry helped me move on.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Your mom really passed? I am sorry, thanks!
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Yes,
my mamma passed away on the 21st of Dec 2006
and my papa' on 9th September 2017.
Thank you for your sympathy, pookietoo!
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Why did you say your mama just died?
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The first phrase is either way but reading on it is obvious I was talking in the past...
anyway, it was not my intention to mislead.
Sorry
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I get it, you were talking about your parents deaths cause my poem is called death
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Yes, your opening line is:
We're never ready to say good-bye
That's why I spoke about my personal experience I missed out on saying goodbye.
Ciao!
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I am sorry you didn't get to say goodbye.
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Thanks pookietoo !
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You are welcome, Tempeste
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents we're both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents we're both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thanks
Comment from shelley kaye
cool pic and quote - so true!
a beautiful calming poem of death, grief, and moving on...
nice work with smooth rhyme and flow and very relatable and empathetic
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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cool pic and quote - so true!
a beautiful calming poem of death, grief, and moving on...
nice work with smooth rhyme and flow and very relatable and empathetic
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The lesson here is to live everyday as if it is our last as we are a long time dead and may people waste their life in depression and lost hope, I enjoyed your sentiment here and your end rhymes, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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The lesson here is to live everyday as if it is our last as we are a long time dead and may people waste their life in depression and lost hope, I enjoyed your sentiment here and your end rhymes, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thanks!