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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is a good story that might be picked up by one of the religious presses, like Zondervan. Ben is a wonderful soul seeking only to help others. The Old Timer senses this all along as Ben saves him and then helps him mine his claim. One change I would make is: Done with Slim, who he had hauled . . . Ben resumed . . .

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
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Another great chapter of a changed life! It's good that Ben is so in tune with the Lord, that he can convince people like the old timer to change his ways and look for a better life.
Comments:
By "burrow" do you mean "burro"?
"Be shook his head at the singular experience." (Ben)

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you for your very kind review. And for the catches.
Comment from BethShelby
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Ben seems to be doing alright working for the Lord. He let to where he can save lives as well as souls and he also seem from the Lord a place where the old timer can stake a claim that get him enough that he can quite working so hard. I enjoying your story.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
    Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Exceptional
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This is well written Wayne. Ben was certainly sent on a mission to save the Ol'Timer, who was certain he was going to die that day before Ben showed up. He was showing a need for salvation when he admitted he was tapping out Amazing Grace and not the Morse Code. LOL Well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
    Thank you for your great review. And thank you immensely for the six stars!
Comment from Wendy G
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Ben certainly seems to be led by God to those who need Him, and he also knows how tollead them to Him. Realistic dialogue, and there accents sound authentic to my Aussie ears.
Wendy
Typo: "Be shook hi head at the singular experience".: "He shook his head ..."

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
    Thank you for your very nice review and the catch.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Great job! You have done it amazing work with this Western tail right down to the accent very believable characters colorful too beautiful. The whole thing is beautifully written and gives me clear and concise image of who and what they are and where they are dialog is excellent. I find noise use with spelling punctuation sentence structure or subject matter. It's all very well done so congrats. I look forward to your next submission hope you have a great day!

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
    Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from royowen
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I think when God guides you anywhere, and if one responds to the Lord's voice, you can't help but be successful, as ol' timer has discovers, even with a broken leg, he still makes it with help. Beautifully written Wayne, good scribing, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
    Thank you for your very kind review.