Seasons of Change
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Comment from karenina
Loving this verse...I thing because it is this very train of thought instilled in me through my own grandparents ~~who, despite the most rugged of times, woe, anger, and illness--refused to let the "fortunes" dictate the power of their union. In a world where many of our youth think "marriage" is a formality not needed....and others seem as happy to skip out of a commitment as though it were canceling an Amazon Membership--there is wonder and beauty in those that emerge standing...
Henley wrote in "Out of the Night That Covers Me" :
"In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance
My head is bloody, but unbowed."
Blessings to all married couples who have not felt this.
(I know of none)
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Loving this verse...I thing because it is this very train of thought instilled in me through my own grandparents ~~who, despite the most rugged of times, woe, anger, and illness--refused to let the "fortunes" dictate the power of their union. In a world where many of our youth think "marriage" is a formality not needed....and others seem as happy to skip out of a commitment as though it were canceling an Amazon Membership--there is wonder and beauty in those that emerge standing...
Henley wrote in "Out of the Night That Covers Me" :
"In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance
My head is bloody, but unbowed."
Blessings to all married couples who have not felt this.
(I know of none)
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Karenina, I could not agree more!
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Oh! I'm so happy you are on-site to read my reactions as I read your great napowrimo postings!
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a wonderful poem written with beautiful words and with much truth to it. This grandfather has learned the true meaning of a good marriage. I loved the similes and metaphors used--the oak, the harbor, the sea, the tree, and many others. This was a real pleasure to read. Jim
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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This was a wonderful poem written with beautiful words and with much truth to it. This grandfather has learned the true meaning of a good marriage. I loved the similes and metaphors used--the oak, the harbor, the sea, the tree, and many others. This was a real pleasure to read. Jim
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Jim, thank you very much, good sir!
Comment from Wendy G
Very nicely written, a poem showing that teamwork and cooperation and working together will help a couple to ride out the storms in their relationship, and come out all the stronger when they arrive together in calm seas. Lovely.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Very nicely written, a poem showing that teamwork and cooperation and working together will help a couple to ride out the storms in their relationship, and come out all the stronger when they arrive together in calm seas. Lovely.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for hanging in there Wendy!
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your metaphors! The metaphor of the rings of the oak tree for the love in a marriage and the hard work of marriage in described as a lifeboat is perfect! I especially liked:
"When in a lifeboat, the two that keep rowing in unison,
with all life's stuff stowed on the marriage raft,"
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Loved your metaphors! The metaphor of the rings of the oak tree for the love in a marriage and the hard work of marriage in described as a lifeboat is perfect! I especially liked:
"When in a lifeboat, the two that keep rowing in unison,
with all life's stuff stowed on the marriage raft,"
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your dedication reviewing and commenting on my project.
Comment from royowen
You appear to be sailing very well indeed, with your spinnaker up and the winds of April pushing you along at a rate of Knots, faster than a power driven ocean going ship. Beautifully written Jim, keep it up, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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You appear to be sailing very well indeed, with your spinnaker up and the winds of April pushing you along at a rate of Knots, faster than a power driven ocean going ship. Beautifully written Jim, keep it up, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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thank you kind sir!
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Welcome Jim
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Season of Love and Marriage, uses a few metaphors and instances to describe a couple's ups and downs within their commitment to one another. Sounds great.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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This poem, Season of Love and Marriage, uses a few metaphors and instances to describe a couple's ups and downs within their commitment to one another. Sounds great.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thank you, sir! If have been the lucky one,
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This verse is full of imagery which I love: the stormy sea conveyed in the picture contrasting with the steadying, strong growth of the oak tree both characterising elements of a long marriage which need to be understood, navigated, circumnavigated and ultimately enjoyed for the benefit and endurance of the partnership. Great wisdom. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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This verse is full of imagery which I love: the stormy sea conveyed in the picture contrasting with the steadying, strong growth of the oak tree both characterising elements of a long marriage which need to be understood, navigated, circumnavigated and ultimately enjoyed for the benefit and endurance of the partnership. Great wisdom. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thanks Debbie!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I like your description of marriage as a safe harbor. Rowing in unison is a good way to explain how you keep your marriage commitment strong. Your picture illustrates well the necessity for "staying afloat."
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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I like your description of marriage as a safe harbor. Rowing in unison is a good way to explain how you keep your marriage commitment strong. Your picture illustrates well the necessity for "staying afloat."
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Verna, thank you!
Comment from Earl Corp
This should have been a contest entry. Each stanza contains a powerful message and gives a blue print on how a marriage should go. Thank you for your author's notes because I thought abaft was a misspelling. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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This should have been a contest entry. Each stanza contains a powerful message and gives a blue print on how a marriage should go. Thank you for your author's notes because I thought abaft was a misspelling. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Earl, thank you so much! This is included in my book of poems for the NaPoMoWri contest - one of thity poems in thirty days. I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The picture certainly complements the poem. The central image of the sea voyage with all its inherent dangers is apt. No voyage is without its dangers and no marriage survives without many challenges! Maybe that's why a lot sink?
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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The picture certainly complements the poem. The central image of the sea voyage with all its inherent dangers is apt. No voyage is without its dangers and no marriage survives without many challenges! Maybe that's why a lot sink?
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Sarah, unfortunely this seems to be the sad truth.
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Best wishes from Cambridge, UK