Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Seasons of Love and Marriage - I"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
9 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Smiling here. I expected you'd be branching off to the changes of a young man's life...and you've opened with a perfect line...
Regardless of gender were we not all puppy dog tails wagging, once? Timidly exploring new emotions, and pondering the sudden shift in perspective we once had of "neighborhood friends" when one particular young man (in my case) or woman (in yours) stood in the new lights of pre-adolescence!
How sweet those days!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Smiling here. I expected you'd be branching off to the changes of a young man's life...and you've opened with a perfect line...
Regardless of gender were we not all puppy dog tails wagging, once? Timidly exploring new emotions, and pondering the sudden shift in perspective we once had of "neighborhood friends" when one particular young man (in my case) or woman (in yours) stood in the new lights of pre-adolescence!
How sweet those days!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Smiles and big thanks!
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Smiles from this end as well... So nice to revisit these emotions!
Comment from patcelaw
I did not have much of a puppy love type teenagers. However, I did have many problems that I had to deal with in my home. I found this poem to be very sweet and cute about how a boy meets a little girl, and they kind of falls in love with her. Patricia
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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I did not have much of a puppy love type teenagers. However, I did have many problems that I had to deal with in my home. I found this poem to be very sweet and cute about how a boy meets a little girl, and they kind of falls in love with her. Patricia
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Patricia, thank you.
Comment from Wendy G
Oh well done, with this insight into a teenage boys' hopes and disappointments, and the first realisation that the path of love is not a smooth and level one. Very nicely written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Oh well done, with this insight into a teenage boys' hopes and disappointments, and the first realisation that the path of love is not a smooth and level one. Very nicely written.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much Wendy.
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah so you have started a new season and with a fine choice of artwork, a barn dance.
This is engaging and light-hearted and features some of that puppy love.
Just a small typo in the title:
Seasons of Love and Marraige (Marriage) - I
You are enjoying your NaPo project and so are your readers.
Thank you for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Ah so you have started a new season and with a fine choice of artwork, a barn dance.
This is engaging and light-hearted and features some of that puppy love.
Just a small typo in the title:
Seasons of Love and Marraige (Marriage) - I
You are enjoying your NaPo project and so are your readers.
Thank you for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you for catching my goof.
Comment from lyenochka
What a great description of the puppy love. I smiled at the washing up in order to impress in case SHE would be close. But then a kiss would keep him from washing his face "for a month"!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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What a great description of the puppy love. I smiled at the washing up in order to impress in case SHE would be close. But then a kiss would keep him from washing his face "for a month"!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Smiles abound! Kinda of cheeky humor intended.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a great beginning for your series. I could just see the angst of the young boy on the cusp of manhood, with the thrills of puppy love and the chills of disappointment.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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This is a great beginning for your series. I could just see the angst of the young boy on the cusp of manhood, with the thrills of puppy love and the chills of disappointment.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Verna, thank you for the nod of approval for this beginning of my next series. Jim
Comment from Sally Law
We must be from the same time. I remember when my favorite time of day was when we pushed back our desks and square danced in class! Can you even believe it? Tis true and how I loved it so. Your brought those memories back from a boy's perspective. Precious poem, and so real to me.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your book of poems.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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We must be from the same time. I remember when my favorite time of day was when we pushed back our desks and square danced in class! Can you even believe it? Tis true and how I loved it so. Your brought those memories back from a boy's perspective. Precious poem, and so real to me.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your book of poems.
Sal :))
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Life back then had far less rules, primarily the Ten Commandments covered most of us during those days.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Oh yes. Puppy love was so intense, wasn't it. I can still remember my first teenage kiss and what the boy looked like, but his name has faded into the mists of time, lost forever. I find that sad. kay
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Oh yes. Puppy love was so intense, wasn't it. I can still remember my first teenage kiss and what the boy looked like, but his name has faded into the mists of time, lost forever. I find that sad. kay
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Kay, those early flames of teenage love ignited in our youth remind me of trying to build fire using green twigs, lots of smoke, no fire. 😕
Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is a very well written cone by practiced intelligent hand I might like the flow of it and your subject matter definitely interesting as love generally is. What time in our lives then we're young and love comes and goes in all that's many forms. I appreciate your poem and the sentiment it provides and thank you for it. I could find no grammatical issues spelling errors no sentence structure issues at all it is very well right now.
The picture you chose is very interesting as well. I don't think I've seen one like that before. Thank you so much for your submission. I wish you the best of luck and have a great day!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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This is a very well written cone by practiced intelligent hand I might like the flow of it and your subject matter definitely interesting as love generally is. What time in our lives then we're young and love comes and goes in all that's many forms. I appreciate your poem and the sentiment it provides and thank you for it. I could find no grammatical issues spelling errors no sentence structure issues at all it is very well right now.
The picture you chose is very interesting as well. I don't think I've seen one like that before. Thank you so much for your submission. I wish you the best of luck and have a great day!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Lea, first a belwted welcome to Fanstory! Secondly, thank you for your especially competent remarks. I love BC, having lived in Seattle many years ago.