Love and Loss
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Blind Minds"NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
8 total reviews
Comment from shelley kaye
wow this was excellent
a powerful message
smooth rhyme and flow
2 inner rhymes, too!
this entry should do well in the contest
thank you for sharing and good luck!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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wow this was excellent
a powerful message
smooth rhyme and flow
2 inner rhymes, too!
this entry should do well in the contest
thank you for sharing and good luck!
shelley :)
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Shelley!:)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Essence poem contest. Good form composition.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Excellent entry for the Essence poem contest. Good form composition.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Are we talking narrow mindedness? Narrow-minded people tend to be very judgmental. They know it all, and they must always be right. "I told you so" is their favorite line. And they are stuck in their habits.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Are we talking narrow mindedness? Narrow-minded people tend to be very judgmental. They know it all, and they must always be right. "I told you so" is their favorite line. And they are stuck in their habits.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Precisely! Thanks so much for your feedback!
Comment from Nicki Nance
I love the clever rhyming with a three syllable word. So well crafted. My favorite phrase, though is "blinded bliss." That really sets up the rest of the poem.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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I love the clever rhyming with a three syllable word. So well crafted. My favorite phrase, though is "blinded bliss." That really sets up the rest of the poem.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much, Nicki!
Comment from patricia dillon
The image of the lonely figure facing the signpost is very evocative. We can probably all think of an occasion when we have chosen "blinded bliss" over harsh reality.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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The image of the lonely figure facing the signpost is very evocative. We can probably all think of an occasion when we have chosen "blinded bliss" over harsh reality.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Patricia!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not quite sure of the meaning here except we are sometimes blind to the good things in life, the fine nature and keeping an open mind is something we have to learn to engage, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Not quite sure of the meaning here except we are sometimes blind to the good things in life, the fine nature and keeping an open mind is something we have to learn to engage, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Dolly!
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Haha so very clever!! It's great! It's so very accurate and true though really is. I hit the nail on the head I think very good job. I see no issues grammatically or aesthetically. It's a lovely poem with a very nice Poem that I don't think needs any tweaks or changes as is pretty great the way it I really like the subject matter you chose.
I think this is a good submission worthy of attention. I wish you all the best and have a great day!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Haha so very clever!! It's great! It's so very accurate and true though really is. I hit the nail on the head I think very good job. I see no issues grammatically or aesthetically. It's a lovely poem with a very nice Poem that I don't think needs any tweaks or changes as is pretty great the way it I really like the subject matter you chose.
I think this is a good submission worthy of attention. I wish you all the best and have a great day!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Lea!!:)
Comment from JT traveller
Not an easy undertaking to write such a poem. Very well done. A clear message was delivered and reinforced through your chosen illustration. Best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Not an easy undertaking to write such a poem. Very well done. A clear message was delivered and reinforced through your chosen illustration. Best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much!
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