Long Flight
Septolet Poem8 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I really liked reading this poem. You have fantastic 'f' alliteration in: Formation
of feathers
forever flapping
This is an inspirational poem that points out maybe even birds have a teeny bit of doubt as to whether they will arrive at a far-off destination. We ought to take comfort in the journey as they do.
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I really liked reading this poem. You have fantastic 'f' alliteration in: Formation
of feathers
forever flapping
This is an inspirational poem that points out maybe even birds have a teeny bit of doubt as to whether they will arrive at a far-off destination. We ought to take comfort in the journey as they do.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
Comment from Lady MJ
The migration of birds is a beautiful sight. I love to see them as they travel on their long journey to warmer climates. A beautiful picture in words and literally. Good imagery.
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The migration of birds is a beautiful sight. I love to see them as they travel on their long journey to warmer climates. A beautiful picture in words and literally. Good imagery.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
Comment from pookietoo
This is nice except the poem is supposed to be two stanzas with seven lines. You do have the right amount of words. Take care, and keep the creative juices flowing.
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This is nice except the poem is supposed to be two stanzas with seven lines. You do have the right amount of words. Take care, and keep the creative juices flowing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These birds are brave intrepid travellers in the skies and I am amazed by their quest for warm weather every year, I enjoyed your fine words about their activity and I expect they ask the same question, love Dolly x
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These birds are brave intrepid travellers in the skies and I am amazed by their quest for warm weather every year, I enjoyed your fine words about their activity and I expect they ask the same question, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Ginda Simpson
How often we think those thoughts when on a long flight home. If only our feathered friends could tell us of their flights! You have opened this idea to our imagination. Nicey done!
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How often we think those thoughts when on a long flight home. If only our feathered friends could tell us of their flights! You have opened this idea to our imagination. Nicey done!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from RodG
Who has not enjoyed watching a flight of geese heading south?
Good use of alliteration in your description of the geese.
I like how you switch POV in stanza 2 as if the geese are talking to one another.
Rod
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Who has not enjoyed watching a flight of geese heading south?
Good use of alliteration in your description of the geese.
I like how you switch POV in stanza 2 as if the geese are talking to one another.
Rod
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from JT traveller
Nice formation of the words in your poem,akin to a flock of birds. I like the repetitive "f" sound throughout the first stanza. It gave your poem a unique spin. Great colour palette and illustration to make your words sing. Well done. Jacqueline
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Nice formation of the words in your poem,akin to a flock of birds. I like the repetitive "f" sound throughout the first stanza. It gave your poem a unique spin. Great colour palette and illustration to make your words sing. Well done. Jacqueline
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your picture plus well thought out words paired nicely,
Mystery Author. Readers could easily see the two parts
of your poem. I didn't see mention of syllable count in
the rules. My only concern was with the two different sizes
of font. It's distracting--almost like an error. I would make
both the same size as the top one.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Your picture plus well thought out words paired nicely,
Mystery Author. Readers could easily see the two parts
of your poem. I didn't see mention of syllable count in
the rules. My only concern was with the two different sizes
of font. It's distracting--almost like an error. I would make
both the same size as the top one.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thanks for your review Jan. Contest rules did not mention syllables, just word count.
Poem was written in Poppins font size 18. I have increased it to 20. Please let me know if you see a size difference in the two parts. There shouldn't be any.
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Looks great! 😊🐈⬛❤️