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Comment from kahpot
How sad, as your words tell of abandonment, whether forced or not the times are surely getting hard, as the climate suffers the people of the land/sea suffer, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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How sad, as your words tell of abandonment, whether forced or not the times are surely getting hard, as the climate suffers the people of the land/sea suffer, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Your poem is so emotional that I even feel sorry for this poor abandoned boat. I enjoyed reading this wonderful poetic package.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Your poem is so emotional that I even feel sorry for this poor abandoned boat. I enjoyed reading this wonderful poetic package.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Barbara, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words.
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Comment from shelley kaye
ooh i love mysterious poems like this
eerily spooky and cool
great gogyohka poem!
may i make a suggestion of "A vacant beach house" (instead of 'the')
just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing!
shelley ð?¦?
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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ooh i love mysterious poems like this
eerily spooky and cool
great gogyohka poem!
may i make a suggestion of "A vacant beach house" (instead of 'the')
just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing!
shelley ð?¦?
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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thank you very much for the excellent five stars review and the kind words. I am happy you like it :) Have a wonderful day or night.
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Comment from w.j.debi
The boat surrendering and the echoes of living give a sad mood to your verse. Both the boat and the boathouse seem to long for purpose that has abandoned them.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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The boat surrendering and the echoes of living give a sad mood to your verse. Both the boat and the boathouse seem to long for purpose that has abandoned them.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
You prove with this poem that a poem can be beautiful without rhyme. All of the description is excellent, but I am drawn especially to "echoes of living cling to bare walls.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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You prove with this poem that a poem can be beautiful without rhyme. All of the description is excellent, but I am drawn especially to "echoes of living cling to bare walls.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Old vessels keep secret memories of the past as they lie abandoned, if only walls and boats could speak of the past they would have many stories to tell, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Old vessels keep secret memories of the past as they lie abandoned, if only walls and boats could speak of the past they would have many stories to tell, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad. I especially liked " echos of living cling to bare walls" (echoes) as that really shows the lack of life when the walls are bare and the home is hollow. Great use of consonance, too!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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That's so sad. I especially liked " echos of living cling to bare walls" (echoes) as that really shows the lack of life when the walls are bare and the home is hollow. Great use of consonance, too!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister. I corrected that word. Big hugs.
Love,
Marival ❤️
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