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Comment from Mary Vigasin
I was just reading an analysis of Edgar Allen Poe's philosophy on poetry. I cannot give an educational and well-written theory on his beliefs, but I will give you what I think he meant. He believed one must capture and grasp the emotion of love, fear, and melancholy in words. One thing too, he kept his subject in a confined area, a room, a dungeon, a castle - tight quarters to keep the reader's imagination and emotion contained.
In reading this emotional charged and well-written poem, I see what he meant.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I was just reading an analysis of Edgar Allen Poe's philosophy on poetry. I cannot give an educational and well-written theory on his beliefs, but I will give you what I think he meant. He believed one must capture and grasp the emotion of love, fear, and melancholy in words. One thing too, he kept his subject in a confined area, a room, a dungeon, a castle - tight quarters to keep the reader's imagination and emotion contained.
In reading this emotional charged and well-written poem, I see what he meant.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Wow, compared to Edgard Allen Poe's style is a true honor.
Mary,
Thank you very much for your time, exceptional six stars review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Ricky1024
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Note: Baby's breath usually represents life, but in this situation it seems completely the opposite?
But anyhow, thanks for sharing. Have a great day!
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Note: Baby's breath usually represents life, but in this situation it seems completely the opposite?
But anyhow, thanks for sharing. Have a great day!
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I really like this one. The picture is great, but the poem is even better. It could be read just as a descriptive poem, and yet it could have such emotional symbolism in it with "dead" lillies and "empty" room. I'm assuming you were telling a story with it.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I really like this one. The picture is great, but the poem is even better. It could be read just as a descriptive poem, and yet it could have such emotional symbolism in it with "dead" lillies and "empty" room. I'm assuming you were telling a story with it.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this sad, but beautiful club entry with us. My best friend's granddaughter had a baby born at 26 weeks. He is still in ICU, but alive. I know that nursery is looking pretty sad right now as we all pray for Henry's health.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you for sharing this sad, but beautiful club entry with us. My best friend's granddaughter had a baby born at 26 weeks. He is still in ICU, but alive. I know that nursery is looking pretty sad right now as we all pray for Henry's health.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Yes, may Henry live long.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Julcia
This poem boasts a superior picture. A stark white text on a matte black background aptly completes this poem's presentation. I read this poet's work with a unique sense of long held back sorrow. As a girl I wanted to have 3 children. When wed I first had a son in my first year of marriage. I knew the other two would come. Never came to us alive. I had two miscarriages. I used to cry in darkened churches and then light 2 candles for these special babies of mine. I am crying now Gypsy. A most
powerful write for those of the grieving mothers of the never been born. Or of the died in the nec u and never
carried oh so carefully home to nursery. Julcia
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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This poem boasts a superior picture. A stark white text on a matte black background aptly completes this poem's presentation. I read this poet's work with a unique sense of long held back sorrow. As a girl I wanted to have 3 children. When wed I first had a son in my first year of marriage. I knew the other two would come. Never came to us alive. I had two miscarriages. I used to cry in darkened churches and then light 2 candles for these special babies of mine. I am crying now Gypsy. A most
powerful write for those of the grieving mothers of the never been born. Or of the died in the nec u and never
carried oh so carefully home to nursery. Julcia
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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I'm sorry for your loss.
Thank you very much for your time, exceptional six stars review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy, wow this cuts to the chase with imagery created with your words
and the sadness it creates of a baby who did not make it. Dead lilies and baby's breath work well in this GOGYOHKA
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Hi Gypsy, wow this cuts to the chase with imagery created with your words
and the sadness it creates of a baby who did not make it. Dead lilies and baby's breath work well in this GOGYOHKA
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from lyenochka
Great job with this gogyohka poem. It reminds me of Hemingway's six word story: Baby shoes for sale: never used. Your unopened boxes in the dark room with the dead lilies show us that the baby has died. And the "baby's breath" for the flower and the lack of the breath of the baby is a great choice of words!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Great job with this gogyohka poem. It reminds me of Hemingway's six word story: Baby shoes for sale: never used. Your unopened boxes in the dark room with the dead lilies show us that the baby has died. And the "baby's breath" for the flower and the lack of the breath of the baby is a great choice of words!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you, big sister. I know that Hemingway's poem, it's awesome.
Love you ❤️
Comment from Jasmine Girl
My God. Was this an abandoned baby? Why was set next to a dead lilies? It's a great presentation. It gave a sense of abandonment by its bleakness.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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My God. Was this an abandoned baby? Why was set next to a dead lilies? It's a great presentation. It gave a sense of abandonment by its bleakness.
Well done.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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No, the baby died at the hospital, that's why his boxes are unopened
Thank you, Lisa. I appreciate your time and excellent review.
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Comment from Douglas Goff
Poignantly creepy. Poems are meant to elicit emotion and I think this one could really waylay someone who has . . . Suffered.
Not all works should be cheery spring fluff pieces. Nicely done Magical Unicorn.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Poignantly creepy. Poems are meant to elicit emotion and I think this one could really waylay someone who has . . . Suffered.
Not all works should be cheery spring fluff pieces. Nicely done Magical Unicorn.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Magical unicorn? LoL
Thank you, Douglas. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
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Comment from aryr
A great GOGYOHKA poem, Gypsy. How sad that the baby died. This was so appropriate with the picture of the empty room. Your words filled in the blanks. Very well done and sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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A great GOGYOHKA poem, Gypsy. How sad that the baby died. This was so appropriate with the picture of the empty room. Your words filled in the blanks. Very well done and sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Aryr. I appreciate your time and excellent review. Blessed be.
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