Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your 100 word story - Good picture presentation - familiar story about schools - always a bully in the class - something kids have to learn to deal with - your story has a positive ending - not usually the case with gangs these days unfortunately. Good write, keep up the good work. AP

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023

Thanks!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This dribble, Clive's Bully, has the proper formatting and sends the message that any situation can be turned around and that seeing the bad in oneself is a look we will all take.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023

Thanks! It has won third place.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

That's a nice ending - but often not the reality of life, unfortunately. nevertheless your story was recounted clearly and well, and the solution was happy. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

Thanks! I hope to win!

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

Your hundred word story provides a great message for young children. It proves that it is is just as easy to be friends as it is to be a bully, except when you are friends, no one is hurt. Great story. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

Thanks!

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Good entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt contest.

I'm not sure about the ending.

The composition is pretty good.

Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

Thanks!

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That was a great contest entry, it's a shame there are bullies around, but all it takes is for one the stand up for himself, and show he won't be intimidated. Well done, this was a great example of how to behave. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

Thanks! I hope I win first place.

Comment from Mario PIERRE

Excellent

It's a great story about the damages bullying can do if not halted. Serves as a reminder for young people to speak up and talk to adults who can do the change.
Good post!

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023

Thanks!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Yes, bullying is a major issue in many schools.
Your story highlighted it well, Mystery Author.
I liked the way it worked out for the better of
all involved. The picture was an appropriate
pairing.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023

Thanks! I hope I win first place!

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

There is no question that bullies need to be confronted for their actions. It can be done on an individual level, or sometimes maybe it takes a few friends or family members. Either way, stand up for yourself. Well done.

One typo in last sentence, Todd needs to be capitalized. Terry.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023

Thanks! It's fixed.

Comment from RodG

Average

Your premise is a good one. No one likes a bully, but how can CLIVE solve his problem? We don't want his family to do it for him. If you were Clive! How might you handle this? The story needs some action.

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 Comment Written 30-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023

Thanks!

reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023

Thank you for your help! I have made the story better as you suggested. Is it better for a five stars rating? Can you please take another look?

reply by RodG on 30-Mar-2023

This is a little better, but still it?s Clive?s family that rescues him. Clive needs to save himself.

reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023

Thanks, but I'm sticking to my story. The others think it is well written.

reply by RodG on 30-Mar-2023

Okay. That?s fine as long as YOU are happy with it.

reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023

Yes, I am happy with it and thank you for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it.