One Man's Calling, Ch 3 ptB
Living up to the call6 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I like your story and the fact that Ben seems to be called to help others. He even checks up on them to be sure they continue to be upright people. There are a couple of problems: ...the town's first(.) . . . owner in Creede(.) You have an excellent vocabulary I have noted in your other stories, but I think maybe some of your words are a little too educated for Western stories. My husband reads Westerns, but I don't usually. William W. Johnstone is a very successful writer you might want to read, not for his story necessarily but for his manner of speaking. I can't remember if he speaks from the POV of only one or a few characters or from the POV of an observer.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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I like your story and the fact that Ben seems to be called to help others. He even checks up on them to be sure they continue to be upright people. There are a couple of problems: ...the town's first(.) . . . owner in Creede(.) You have an excellent vocabulary I have noted in your other stories, but I think maybe some of your words are a little too educated for Western stories. My husband reads Westerns, but I don't usually. William W. Johnstone is a very successful writer you might want to read, not for his story necessarily but for his manner of speaking. I can't remember if he speaks from the POV of only one or a few characters or from the POV of an observer.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your review. I'll keep an eye out for 'over-sophistication'.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I am out of sixes Wayne, but I am so happy to see another western writer here on FS now. We had a few in the past but they have either left or passed on to their reward. I enjoyed your chapter and you even spiced it up with a calling from God for Ben. Well done. I just hope my eyes hold out to review your book. Enjoyed. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023
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I am out of sixes Wayne, but I am so happy to see another western writer here on FS now. We had a few in the past but they have either left or passed on to their reward. I enjoyed your chapter and you even spiced it up with a calling from God for Ben. Well done. I just hope my eyes hold out to review your book. Enjoyed. Nancy:)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Yes, Ben's calling is the issue in every chapter.
Comment from BethShelby
Ben is an unusual character. It would likely be a better world if we could all feel that we were acting under the direction of God at all times. I'm anxious to see where Ben ends up next.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Ben is an unusual character. It would likely be a better world if we could all feel that we were acting under the direction of God at all times. I'm anxious to see where Ben ends up next.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from royowen
It seems Salinger wants Ben, and because he pays a big part of the sherrif)# pay he thinks he has the right, but I think Ben will do the right thing no matter what! But Ben starts to leave of his volition fully knowing what his calling is, he encounters an evil looking man, but keeps out of his, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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It seems Salinger wants Ben, and because he pays a big part of the sherrif)# pay he thinks he has the right, but I think Ben will do the right thing no matter what! But Ben starts to leave of his volition fully knowing what his calling is, he encounters an evil looking man, but keeps out of his, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you!
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Bless you
Comment from Ricky1024
"One Man calling"
(chapter 3) was well written, written theme and imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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"One Man calling"
(chapter 3) was well written, written theme and imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting chapter. I did wonder why Ben doesn't feel called to marriage, although not long back he was kissing Livvy, and leading her to assume her affection was returned. Good that Salinger has left town, but the newcomer may have been sent by him to get rid of Ben.
Wendy
Typo: Ben injected himself (Ben interjected)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Interesting chapter. I did wonder why Ben doesn't feel called to marriage, although not long back he was kissing Livvy, and leading her to assume her affection was returned. Good that Salinger has left town, but the newcomer may have been sent by him to get rid of Ben.
Wendy
Typo: Ben injected himself (Ben interjected)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
I think Ben and Livvy kissing would have been natural. Maybe I could go back and insert how Ben began to understand that he was not to marry Livvy, but to move on. (He IS only human, after all.) smiley face here
Thank you for your very kind review.
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Yeah, I guess so. But I was waiting for him to go back to her! Lol.
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You romantic, you!
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