The Ski Trip
My sister's first and only ski adventure32 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
Your story took me to my childhood days when on phone was used by the friendly neighbour hood .The owner of the phone never minded!I can imgine the the tension the family went through to be replaced by a stiffer shocker!
What gret planning by Rose and Lulu.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Your story took me to my childhood days when on phone was used by the friendly neighbour hood .The owner of the phone never minded!I can imgine the the tension the family went through to be replaced by a stiffer shocker!
What gret planning by Rose and Lulu.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your review. I have to admit Dad was a bit gullible, but Rose was his buddy for awhile.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from prettybluebirds
Rose chose a strange way to start a marriage. I hope you continue writing about Rose so we can see where life took her. I love the humor you added throughout the story. Nice writing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Rose chose a strange way to start a marriage. I hope you continue writing about Rose so we can see where life took her. I love the humor you added throughout the story. Nice writing.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your review. Rose has certainly given me quite a bit of material to write about.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from damommy
Aside from eloping at 17, and lying to your father, I rather like Rose. She stands up for everyone and takes no foolishness from anyone. Sorry, her marriage didn't last, but I know she is a survivor.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Aside from eloping at 17, and lying to your father, I rather like Rose. She stands up for everyone and takes no foolishness from anyone. Sorry, her marriage didn't last, but I know she is a survivor.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your review. You are about Rose she is even to this day a feisty senior!
Take care and thank you
Mary
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"wanting to head off any concerns of dad" seems to read better as wanting to head off any of dad's concerns. Possibly consider that.
"As evidence" should As evidenced because the rest of that sentence is past tense and "evidence" is singular.
Seems like Rose, for as tough a facade as she put up, was not all she cracked herself up to be and ran with a not so positive crowd.
Can not blame the father for being angry.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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"wanting to head off any concerns of dad" seems to read better as wanting to head off any of dad's concerns. Possibly consider that.
"As evidence" should As evidenced because the rest of that sentence is past tense and "evidence" is singular.
Seems like Rose, for as tough a facade as she put up, was not all she cracked herself up to be and ran with a not so positive crowd.
Can not blame the father for being angry.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the review and suggestions Brett, I will review and revise.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, Rose may have been better off skiing than running off to marry Angelo. But it's all the catastrophes of life that we can look back on now and laugh about how stupid we were. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Yes, Rose may have been better off skiing than running off to marry Angelo. But it's all the catastrophes of life that we can look back on now and laugh about how stupid we were. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you Ric, I appreciate your review and your right skiing would have been much better for Rose.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from Ulla
Wow, I love this story about going skiing, and you being so worried with all the accidents there could befall your sister, only to learn that she had eloped with her lover. Quite the twist at the end. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Wow, I love this story about going skiing, and you being so worried with all the accidents there could befall your sister, only to learn that she had eloped with her lover. Quite the twist at the end. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you Ulla for your review and kind comments. I am glad you enjoyed the story.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Evidently this is a nonfiction story. It is wonderful when a person can ski and not break any bones. There just was an athletic case where a young lady was found not guilty of running into another person when skiing.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Evidently this is a nonfiction story. It is wonderful when a person can ski and not break any bones. There just was an athletic case where a young lady was found not guilty of running into another person when skiing.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the review Rosemary
Best regards,
Mary
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Did your sister's marriage last? Seventeen is such a young age to get married. But youngsters think they know everything, when really, they know nothing about life. I enjoyed this, Mary, I'll have to look for your earlier one. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Did your sister's marriage last? Seventeen is such a young age to get married. But youngsters think they know everything, when really, they know nothing about life. I enjoyed this, Mary, I'll have to look for your earlier one. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you Sandra for your review. Rose's marriage did not last. At 20, she was a single mom with two kids, but she was a fighter, she went to work and raised her two kids.
Mary
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent story that had me imagining the worst until the worse than the worst happened. I wonder. Was your father less of a pushover after these traumatic events? I would imagine perhaps he could be. kay
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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This is an excellent story that had me imagining the worst until the worse than the worst happened. I wonder. Was your father less of a pushover after these traumatic events? I would imagine perhaps he could be. kay
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you Kay for your review. My dad was a good man, but he could not say no to Rose. He was lost after my mother's early death.
Best regards,
Mary
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Oh wow great story! And quite the twist as well! Excellent work. Enjoyed this very much, the time setting, the colorful characters and sharp imagery you give in your writing.
I can find no grammatical issues with your writing spelling punctuation sentence structure all are very well. I especially enjoy the picture you have chosen quite comical!
This is a great submission worthy of recognition I thank you and hope you have a great day!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Oh wow great story! And quite the twist as well! Excellent work. Enjoyed this very much, the time setting, the colorful characters and sharp imagery you give in your writing.
I can find no grammatical issues with your writing spelling punctuation sentence structure all are very well. I especially enjoy the picture you have chosen quite comical!
This is a great submission worthy of recognition I thank you and hope you have a great day!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you Lea, I truly appreciate your kind words and review.
Best wishes,
Mary
