Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023

Thank you so much, my friend! Blessings,
Sal XOs

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 13-Sep-2023

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Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

I like this line. It may stir up fears in the reader, or at least a curiosity for it: "fearing the imaginary dangers around him." The several mentions of coffee does not go unnoticed. When I get things swirling around in my head around midnight I had to quickly figure theings out in the moment so I could go back to sleep: "Staring at the clock, he saw it was only midnight, and moaned again." The ending is tempting.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter. I?m so glad you?re enjoying it all. Sending love my very best to you and yours, Sally Thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter. I?m so glad you?re enjoying it all. Sending along my very best to you and yours, Sally XOs

reply by Liz O'Neill on 14-Apr-2023

***smile***

Comment from Father Flaps

Exceptional

Hi Sally,
Great chapter! I especially like the first part about FEE at the old cabin. He was only thinking of his safety, nothing else. He's going to have to get a plan in order very quickly. The cabin should be good enough for some heavy duty thinking. If he was smart, he'd just try to escape the area entirely. He's actually painted himself into a corner. I was once a hunter many years ago, and the family had a fairly rough log cabin near Cappel Lake. So, I can picture the scene very well.
There's just one line, really just one word that bothered me...

"The young mother, who'd been robbed of her teenage life, trod softly through the kitchen and prepared a large mug of coffee, remembering it was half cream and half coffee for Simon, and coffee and a dab of cream for herself." ... ("trod" doesn't sound right to me, although I know it is. I suggest,
Treading softly to the kitchen, the young mother, who'd been robbed of her teenage life, prepared large mugs of coffee, remembering it was triple cream for Simon, and just a dab of cream for herself.)

Nicely penned! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023

Dear Kim, Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars! Both mean the world to me. Sending you my best today and Easter Blessings! Sal XOs

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

They think Simon set the fire, like they were supposed to, but I'm sure Betty Jo and the others can tell them where he was. It couldn't have been him, because he was busy hiding in the bushes outside Betty Jo's place.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023

Thank you for the lovely review of my book chapter. It is most appreciated. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs

Comment from poetwatch

Excellent

Candace and Simon, getting together, Sally? :) You are not only a writer of detective stories, but a romantic ar heart. :) Now, the sheriff is at the door. What does he want? I don't know. Guess I'll wait on the next one. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Yes, a romance writer too. I have a book of them. Thanks so much for stopping, Jose. Blessings,
Sal :))

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Plenty of romance to go with the drama keeps thsee characters interesting, Sally. A timely finish with the loud knock on the door and Sherrif Gonzales and his troops waiting, but for what?
This story is going well.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Thank you for the wonderful review of my book chapter and for catching up, dear Valda. Blessings to you always, Sally XOs

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

Another great chapter, well written. I like the new relationship blooming between Candace and Simon. And I'm glad there will soon be an end to Fee's evil. Good dialogue between Candace and Simon. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Dear Carol, Thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter. It is so needed and appreciated. Blessings to you all, Sally xoxo?s

reply by Carol Clark2 on 07-Apr-2023

Hugs and happy Easter!

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Simon sounds like he's changing his life from bad to worse. His father, Fee, is a troublemaker from way back. Being he has found new love? just probably that is changing Simon.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Rosemary! Sal :)) xo

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I'm enjoying your exciting story. You always manage to get the love element into your mystries and crime stories. Simon and Candice deserve something good in their lives for a change. I'm looking forward to more.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023

Thank you, Beth! Blessings! Sal XOs

Comment from Mary Shifman

Exceptional

Excellent chapter. I do like Simon. Somehow I always forget that these are chapters are cliffhangers and end just when I'm anxious to know what's going to happen next! Oh well, I have something to look forward too.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023

Thank you for the lovely review of my book chapter. It is most appreciated. The generous stars have truly blessed me.

Sending you my best today as always, dear Mary.
Sal XOs

reply by Mary Shifman on 09-Apr-2023

You are most welcome.