I wait.
15 words love poem12 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
I Wait, implies waiting for a lover. Your well chosen words 'sighing' and 'yearning' also implies feelings for a lover. Can nighttime wind be confused for breath? In poetry, I guess anything can happen. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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I Wait, implies waiting for a lover. Your well chosen words 'sighing' and 'yearning' also implies feelings for a lover. Can nighttime wind be confused for breath? In poetry, I guess anything can happen. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry was well thought out, Sanku.
I liked the image and your word choices. Those
words were a bit mysterious. You left readers
wondering about the outcome which was interesting
to think about.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Your contest entry was well thought out, Sanku.
I liked the image and your word choices. Those
words were a bit mysterious. You left readers
wondering about the outcome which was interesting
to think about.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The nighttime is really showing in this image. Why does the nights seem lonely when there's no one around. The quietness gets to a person. You can hear every bit of sound, unless its someone's breath making the noise. Are you still waiting~
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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The nighttime is really showing in this image. Why does the nights seem lonely when there's no one around. The quietness gets to a person. You can hear every bit of sound, unless its someone's breath making the noise. Are you still waiting~
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Comment from Wendy G
Very atmospheric, both in the choice of image and the words. The unknown ending is a nice touch. The reader doesn't know whether the lover has come, or the relationship has broken up .... Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Very atmospheric, both in the choice of image and the words. The unknown ending is a nice touch. The reader doesn't know whether the lover has come, or the relationship has broken up .... Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
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Comment from Mary Shifman
This is really beautiful. One's imagination can go in several directions. To me, it seems to indicate that someone is waiting for a special someone to finally show up in their life. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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This is really beautiful. One's imagination can go in several directions. To me, it seems to indicate that someone is waiting for a special someone to finally show up in their life. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
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Comment from jmdg1954
Tough to write a story whether in poem or prose in fifteen words or less.
I like how the tone was set.., night wind sighed
echoing
Or was it her breath that had him yearning?
Left to the readers imagination.
John
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Tough to write a story whether in poem or prose in fifteen words or less.
I like how the tone was set.., night wind sighed
echoing
Or was it her breath that had him yearning?
Left to the readers imagination.
John
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This one was one of those poems that was almost supernatural in its feel. The missing lover. The noises or occurances that make the other think they are present. The deepness of a love that can be felt through your words. This was beautiful. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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This one was one of those poems that was almost supernatural in its feel. The missing lover. The noises or occurances that make the other think they are present. The deepness of a love that can be felt through your words. This was beautiful. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
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Comment from Kerry Foley
Ooooo.., I really love this. I could feel the strong emotion within the little bit of words you use. Great picture to pair with it. Seductive, in the good entry.
Good luck!
-Kerry.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Ooooo.., I really love this. I could feel the strong emotion within the little bit of words you use. Great picture to pair with it. Seductive, in the good entry.
Good luck!
-Kerry.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not quite sure what is going on here except to say there is a yearning for someone and their breath here and as it is a love poem then I expect there is some intimacy here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Not quite sure what is going on here except to say there is a yearning for someone and their breath here and as it is a love poem then I expect there is some intimacy here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
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Comment from Ricky1024
Just writing prompt entry entitled I wait was well written rich in Theme and Imagery
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Just writing prompt entry entitled I wait was well written rich in Theme and Imagery
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.