Taste of My Reality
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Breakfront Force"The Pathway to Pain and Misery
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I hate using a lot of commas, but the way you write they're required. I did enjoy reading.
Yes Master but he's so hairy! (comma after 'Master', you're addressing him.)
Well you need to realize Imar. (comma after 'Well,')
Yes I know Master. (comma after 'Yes' and one after 'know')
Well my blind and Noble servant. (comma after 'Well,')
Yes Imar. (comma after 'yes')
Ninehours later (Nine hours)
Master you want me to take the corpse down and burn it now? (comma after 'Master,')
Master or just let it Rot and bury it like a dog? (comma after 'Master,')
Well let's do both Imar. (comma after 'Well,')
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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I hate using a lot of commas, but the way you write they're required. I did enjoy reading.
Yes Master but he's so hairy! (comma after 'Master', you're addressing him.)
Well you need to realize Imar. (comma after 'Well,')
Yes I know Master. (comma after 'Yes' and one after 'know')
Well my blind and Noble servant. (comma after 'Well,')
Yes Imar. (comma after 'yes')
Ninehours later (Nine hours)
Master you want me to take the corpse down and burn it now? (comma after 'Master,')
Master or just let it Rot and bury it like a dog? (comma after 'Master,')
Well let's do both Imar. (comma after 'Well,')
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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I think I added about eight commas. I believe that took care of it?
Thanks Barbara!
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A very relevant story at this point of time. It puts the Easter story into modern terms and makes it seem closer than sometimes is the case with the classic biblical version. The picture is very well chosen!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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A very relevant story at this point of time. It puts the Easter story into modern terms and makes it seem closer than sometimes is the case with the classic biblical version. The picture is very well chosen!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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I thank you Sarah.
And I'm so very glad for your review and that you appreciated this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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All best from UK
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Never been but new someone.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A reenactment of this famous biblical story is appropriate for the forthcoming celebration Ricky and your dialogue is is gritty and confirms that humanity is flawed and we all need saving, much enjoyed, I loved the artwork too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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A reenactment of this famous biblical story is appropriate for the forthcoming celebration Ricky and your dialogue is is gritty and confirms that humanity is flawed and we all need saving, much enjoyed, I loved the artwork too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thanks Dolly for the review and six stars !
Note:Not only did this bring.
A Great pain into my always and Forever Broken Heart.
Writing it as I've done hundreds of times.
Yes but also a feeling of worthiness as well as forgiveness for what we have done to Him.
Doctor Ricky
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You are most welcome Ricky x x x
Comment from Nicki Nance
Such a timely piece. This is a brilliant way to angle in on something that already has a lot of coverage. These two characters are alarmingly realistic.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Such a timely piece. This is a brilliant way to angle in on something that already has a lot of coverage. These two characters are alarmingly realistic.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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I wanted the characters to be very sick and evil.
Yes but I wouldn't really name the main character.
I left that up to the reviewer to do that and think about.
And, Thanks Nikki for stopping by.
Doctor Ricky
