A Dream
A fragment of a dream6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This dribble, A Dream, has the proper formatting and strikes me as funny. As dreams often do, the values and the situations seem right at the time and odd when awake. I had to look up sesterces, which haven't been around since the Roman Empire, so buying this silver with gold would only make sense in dreamland. Funny.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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This dribble, A Dream, has the proper formatting and strikes me as funny. As dreams often do, the values and the situations seem right at the time and odd when awake. I had to look up sesterces, which haven't been around since the Roman Empire, so buying this silver with gold would only make sense in dreamland. Funny.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2023
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Thank you for taking the time. I'm glad it amused you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry was well thought out, Patricia.
I enjoyed reading it. Your words were well-chosen
and descriptive. You gave readers much to think
about with the twist at the end as to what may have
happened to cause this in the first place.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Your contest entry was well thought out, Patricia.
I enjoyed reading it. Your words were well-chosen
and descriptive. You gave readers much to think
about with the twist at the end as to what may have
happened to cause this in the first place.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from royowen
I suppose whatever the culture, it can be a little perilous to have an unacceptable relationship, and it may be the only way to get one's real life desire fulfilled, well done, good luck, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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I suppose whatever the culture, it can be a little perilous to have an unacceptable relationship, and it may be the only way to get one's real life desire fulfilled, well done, good luck, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.
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Most welcome
Comment from jessizero
I like this "dream fragment" you wrote here. It accomplishes much with very few words. The last line was very effective. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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I like this "dream fragment" you wrote here. It accomplishes much with very few words. The last line was very effective. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sweet romantic write and I loved this clever write Patricia, you brought the magic to this story of lovers eloping together, I enjoyed it very much, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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A sweet romantic write and I loved this clever write Patricia, you brought the magic to this story of lovers eloping together, I enjoyed it very much, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, Dolly.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
You excellently covered the whole story in the time it took to write a dribble flash fiction. I want to point out one typo. When you said the dealer will give you a receipt you wrote guve instead of give but it is an easy thing to fix. Otherwise, this is well done and it deals with a process that happens in other parts of the world every day.
Jesse
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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You excellently covered the whole story in the time it took to write a dribble flash fiction. I want to point out one typo. When you said the dealer will give you a receipt you wrote guve instead of give but it is an easy thing to fix. Otherwise, this is well done and it deals with a process that happens in other parts of the world every day.
Jesse
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome. I hope you fix the typo I pointed out to you. It will help you on your way to becoming a better writer.
Jesse
