Paper Bag Tumbling
Paper Bags at the mercy of Nature and Man.16 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile with this simple poetic write about a paper bag taking to the air and journeying around the planet, a fun post Barry, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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You made me smile with this simple poetic write about a paper bag taking to the air and journeying around the planet, a fun post Barry, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Dolly,
Once again I must thak you for taking the time to read my flash fiction entry. Glad you enjoyed it and of course it was different and light hearted. You take care now and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Sally Law
Or plastic bags. Here where I live, plastic bags are offered first at the grocerers. Tumbling trash vexes me and stains our lovely world. A thought provoking short, Barry Penfold.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Or plastic bags. Here where I live, plastic bags are offered first at the grocerers. Tumbling trash vexes me and stains our lovely world. A thought provoking short, Barry Penfold.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thanks Sally for tking
Thanks Sally for taking the time to review my contest entry. Glad you like it. A bit different but lets see how it goes. You take care and have a great day
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I am always intrigued with what writers will do with a 50 word challenge. I like that you have chosen the journey of a paper bag in the breeze. It invites us to take it to a place in the reader's imagination. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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I am always intrigued with what writers will do with a 50 word challenge. I like that you have chosen the journey of a paper bag in the breeze. It invites us to take it to a place in the reader's imagination. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Ginda,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my flash fiction entry. Something a little different.
Hope you have a great day and and please take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Paul McFarland
That was a little different, Barry. I think you have a good idea for the contest. You have one sentence that is a little wanting, but you should do okay.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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That was a little different, Barry. I think you have a good idea for the contest. You have one sentence that is a little wanting, but you should do okay.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Ha Ha. Thanks Paul and it is certainly is a bit different. I seem to be going through a phase of just doing things a bit differently. Not sure it really helps for competitions but I am more concerned just to see how it is received.
I hope you are well and keep writing.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
A very as they said in the old days psychedelic picture. Pretty cool actually I can like it. I also quite enjoyed your poem very well. Put together lovely poem and a great job you have fulfilled the contest. Rules to perfection and produced a lovely piece of work.
I like your way with words and how you put them together. You? Have a unique style which is all your own quite a well done home? Congratulations I find no issues except to say perhaps turn up the font just a little bit on your texts. It's quite small and some older people might have trouble reading it other than that. It's perfection luck in the contrast and I hope have a great day!
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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A very as they said in the old days psychedelic picture. Pretty cool actually I can like it. I also quite enjoyed your poem very well. Put together lovely poem and a great job you have fulfilled the contest. Rules to perfection and produced a lovely piece of work.
I like your way with words and how you put them together. You? Have a unique style which is all your own quite a well done home? Congratulations I find no issues except to say perhaps turn up the font just a little bit on your texts. It's quite small and some older people might have trouble reading it other than that. It's perfection luck in the contrast and I hope have a great day!
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Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Lea,
Thanks for taking time to do a review. It is a little bit different and I am glad you liked it. I note your suggestion on turning up the font.
You take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from JT traveller
No one wants to tread on that paper bag to stop it in its course. We all know about the flaming paper bag on the doorstep trick.
Nice flash fiction entry. Best of luck in the competition.
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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No one wants to tread on that paper bag to stop it in its course. We all know about the flaming paper bag on the doorstep trick.
Nice flash fiction entry. Best of luck in the competition.
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Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my story. A little different but I am glad you liked it. Why is it that no one wants to step on the paper bag? Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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You've never heard the doorbell ring and opened it to find a burning brown paper bag on your doorstep/porch? Let alone committed this trick as a child yourself? Haha. Must be an Australian thing.
