The Aspen Grove Murders
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Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. I especially like the part where the angel puts out the fire. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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This is an excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. I especially like the part where the angel puts out the fire. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Elizabeth. Blessings for your week. Sal :))
Comment from patcelaw
This is an extremely interesting story, and I am enjoying it very much. I do wish you the very best in all of your writing as you continue to write. Such lovely work. May you have a blessed day in the Lord. Patricia.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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This is an extremely interesting story, and I am enjoying it very much. I do wish you the very best in all of your writing as you continue to write. Such lovely work. May you have a blessed day in the Lord. Patricia.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the wonderful review of my book chapter. I'm glad you're enjoying it all. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo's
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The dialogue is well written and used to develop character and push the action forward. The introduction of the blind detective comes at a critical point in the story. The end of the chapter is full of impending menace! I think there is a typo- 'bare'?
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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The dialogue is well written and used to develop character and push the action forward. The introduction of the blind detective comes at a critical point in the story. The end of the chapter is full of impending menace! I think there is a typo- 'bare'?
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the great review and kind compliments. Yes, I am blind and I use voice over text to write as well as a special keyboard. Similar words like bare and bear seem to be my nemesis. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal xo
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Well, I make far more errors then you. Then, I am getting more and more deaf!
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I'm sorry to hear that! Thank you again for reaching. Sal :))
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All best wishes
Comment from Sankey
Another great read but for some reason your spell checker has let you down! A few spags to look at. in Meyers'{s] OR
in Meyer[s]'s
so nice to [be] meet you
would be brought to b(e)ar[e]
The following confirms the correct name above...{Meyer's Hollow}
Seeing it was dark I thought the following should be changed...He fell (up)the [up the] brick
and set [down] the bag down
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Another great read but for some reason your spell checker has let you down! A few spags to look at. in Meyers'{s] OR
in Meyer[s]'s
so nice to [be] meet you
would be brought to b(e)ar[e]
The following confirms the correct name above...{Meyer's Hollow}
Seeing it was dark I thought the following should be changed...He fell (up)the [up the] brick
and set [down] the bag down
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you for coming to my rescue, dear Geoff. I accidentally posted this sometime yesterday when I had exited FanStory edit in a hurry. I appreciate your kind help and helpful proofreading, my friend. The six stars is very generous of you. Thank you, again! Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, it looks like Fee has met his match with the mysterious voice. And we have the renowned detective Sally Law on the case. With the Angel Patience and Sally Law ... the bad guys don't have much of a chance ... though I'm sure you will make it a battle to the end. Only one thing to look at:
"It has been difficult, but in the same of the sadness," [I know this is just an oversight, and that others have probably pointed it out, but I believe you meant "name" of the sadness (though it still doesn't sound right to my ears).]
Good job, Sally!
Jay
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Well, it looks like Fee has met his match with the mysterious voice. And we have the renowned detective Sally Law on the case. With the Angel Patience and Sally Law ... the bad guys don't have much of a chance ... though I'm sure you will make it a battle to the end. Only one thing to look at:
"It has been difficult, but in the same of the sadness," [I know this is just an oversight, and that others have probably pointed it out, but I believe you meant "name" of the sadness (though it still doesn't sound right to my ears).]
Good job, Sally!
Jay
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, Jay. I posted this by accident. I?ve been scurrying around trying to get it fixed and polished. I typically post on Monday. Hopefully I have it all fixed now so I can go to bed. Good grief! I can?t believe that happened.
Thank you again! Sal XOs
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This line creates a nice allusion as readers like me smile at the familiar words on our show tv 9-1-1: "A female voice came on the line. "9-1-1, what's your emergency?" And presenting. Trumpets playing the march of the queen: "To her right, an enormous German Shepherd stood erect and observant." The reader thrills at the introduction: ""I'm Detective Sally Law, and this is my dog, Officer King." You are drawing the reader in: " Mysterious calls have been coming from this area code to her mother on special occasions." Is Fee imagining the words like Poe in the 'Tell-Tale-Heart?' or is it really someone. We will be back. A+
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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This line creates a nice allusion as readers like me smile at the familiar words on our show tv 9-1-1: "A female voice came on the line. "9-1-1, what's your emergency?" And presenting. Trumpets playing the march of the queen: "To her right, an enormous German Shepherd stood erect and observant." The reader thrills at the introduction: ""I'm Detective Sally Law, and this is my dog, Officer King." You are drawing the reader in: " Mysterious calls have been coming from this area code to her mother on special occasions." Is Fee imagining the words like Poe in the 'Tell-Tale-Heart?' or is it really someone. We will be back. A+
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you for this fabulous review. You probably had no idea I posted this accidentally. I did. I must have hit end preview on my way out of preview. When I was going to bed, I saw your review. So sorry it wasn?t promoted for you. Thank you, again. You blessed me good! Sal XOs
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I enjoyed it
