A Poetic Pause
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4 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Lea,
thank you for participating in the haiku club event. Good entry. Good syllable count. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Notes:
Fresh coffee, buds burst,
Hot java, rose perks.
Beans and blooms, miracle mix.
(haiku rules: no capital letters (except proper names); no punctuation (except dash at the end of the second line to pause before the *satori), especially in the middle of the line because haiku should be read in one breath with no stops) *satori is an insightful phrase usually in the last line
fresh coffee buds burst
hot java beans bloom and perks --
miracle mix
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Hello, Lea,
thank you for participating in the haiku club event. Good entry. Good syllable count. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Notes:
Fresh coffee, buds burst,
Hot java, rose perks.
Beans and blooms, miracle mix.
(haiku rules: no capital letters (except proper names); no punctuation (except dash at the end of the second line to pause before the *satori), especially in the middle of the line because haiku should be read in one breath with no stops) *satori is an insightful phrase usually in the last line
fresh coffee buds burst
hot java beans bloom and perks --
miracle mix
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your comments for your kind words I will certainly take those to heart. I greatly appreciate it hope you're having a wonderful day!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I really like these poem and it's so creative. I don't see people mix coffee with Lilac blooms. Are lilacs blooming already in your state? We are still skiing here.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I really like these poem and it's so creative. I don't see people mix coffee with Lilac blooms. Are lilacs blooming already in your state? We are still skiing here.
Excellent.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you so very much I'm so glad you like this very surprised. Yeah I tried to be light and cheery and but what happened today? Thank you have a great day or night actually l o l!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is an unusable syllable count for this Haiku Lea 5,7,7. Normally they are 5,7,5. Nonetheless I enjoyed the mix of aromas here tantalising the senses, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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There is an unusable syllable count for this Haiku Lea 5,7,7. Normally they are 5,7,5. Nonetheless I enjoyed the mix of aromas here tantalising the senses, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Oh damn...ty! I hope you're doing okay and thanks for the rebiew Dolly have a great evening!
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
This makes me want a coffee!! I can almost smell it it because of your wonderfully descriptive words, Lea! Nice flow, and creative idea for the task at hand. Truly enjoyed thanks so much for sharing!
<3
Jessica
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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This makes me want a coffee!! I can almost smell it it because of your wonderfully descriptive words, Lea! Nice flow, and creative idea for the task at hand. Truly enjoyed thanks so much for sharing!
<3
Jessica
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I'm so glad you liked it jessica I hope yourself an awesome day!