Tightrope Walk
Balance is the key to all things11 total reviews
Comment from Julie Lau
This is an interesting approach, comparing the need for a balance in life with walking a tightrope, where a lack of balance would be fatal. The fellow in the picture seems to have had a bit of trouble earlier: let's hope he can get that other foot back on! Well written within the minute restrictions. JL
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This is an interesting approach, comparing the need for a balance in life with walking a tightrope, where a lack of balance would be fatal. The fellow in the picture seems to have had a bit of trouble earlier: let's hope he can get that other foot back on! Well written within the minute restrictions. JL
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Julie, thank you for your review and feedback! Not to worry, he leaned with the sway and balanced out eventually. ;)
Comment from Jane Jane King
Very interesting and wise line of thought. Life is indeed a balancing act. Everything is relative. I think keeping things in perspective is the main key here. I enjoyed this poem
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Very interesting and wise line of thought. Life is indeed a balancing act. Everything is relative. I think keeping things in perspective is the main key here. I enjoyed this poem
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Hi Jessica,
I'm Liz, doing the Be Wee With Bea series now. Debbie Pick Marquette did a poetic tribute feature on you to introduce us to you. I usually review as if I were reading something my creative writing students wrote. I focus on language and the literary techniques I notice. If you'd like a link of those, let me know***now your poem:
You have strong metaphors, some of them personified. Also the d's of alliteration give a definite sense of intention. Also, I recently learned that using b is very effective as a little explosion occurs in our mouth when we pronounce b. The s's are great to use, as they are mutable. In this one the s's give the sound of the empty air. Well done. Welcome to our group, that eventually become family members we can choose.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hi Jessica,
I'm Liz, doing the Be Wee With Bea series now. Debbie Pick Marquette did a poetic tribute feature on you to introduce us to you. I usually review as if I were reading something my creative writing students wrote. I focus on language and the literary techniques I notice. If you'd like a link of those, let me know***now your poem:
You have strong metaphors, some of them personified. Also the d's of alliteration give a definite sense of intention. Also, I recently learned that using b is very effective as a little explosion occurs in our mouth when we pronounce b. The s's are great to use, as they are mutable. In this one the s's give the sound of the empty air. Well done. Welcome to our group, that eventually become family members we can choose.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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I am so appreciative of your review and offered insight. I would absolutely love that link, if you don't mind. I'm humbled by your compliment and warm welcome. I am so happy to be here.
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Jessica
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The first is fun: http://writtensound.com/index.php
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https://literary-devices.com/juxtaposition/
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http://ppando.cumbresblogs.com/files/2015/03/Literary-Techniques-and-Figures-of-Speech.pdf
I also have in about using quotation marks if you are interested. I show the correct punctuation for every situation
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http://theeditorsblog.net/2010/12/08/punctuation-in-dialogue/
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These are incredible. I am so grateful, I couldn't resist immediately printing a copy of the Literary Devices, Techniques and Figures of Speech and taking it right on to my husbands bulletin board! Let's just say, he's more of a numbers guy. What a fantastic refresher and learning tool you've shared, thank you so much!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the Minute poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. I like it centered on the visual. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. I like how you compare life to a tightrope walk. The spacing of text in your poem box is balanced. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the Minute poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. I like it centered on the visual. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. I like how you compare life to a tightrope walk. The spacing of text in your poem box is balanced. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, Sandra!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
If I had to walk in a straight line, I could do it. But if it would come to tight rope walking, there might be a rethought in doing so. To rethink this kind of stunt, would perhaps lose its sturdiness if we were to fall. I like your poem tho.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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If I had to walk in a straight line, I could do it. But if it would come to tight rope walking, there might be a rethought in doing so. To rethink this kind of stunt, would perhaps lose its sturdiness if we were to fall. I like your poem tho.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for this thought provoking review!
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
Exactly, balance is everything. We all need balance in our lives. You have addressed this perfectly and I love the idea of a tightrope walker whose life depends on balance. Great job!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Exactly, balance is everything. We all need balance in our lives. You have addressed this perfectly and I love the idea of a tightrope walker whose life depends on balance. Great job!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much!! I appreciate your kind words and feedback!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, wisdom is difficult to apprehend but easy to learn the principals, Heaven knows walking in wisdom is much more difficult than actually knowing but not doing it. Beautifully written my friend, great minute poem, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Oh yes indeed, wisdom is difficult to apprehend but easy to learn the principals, Heaven knows walking in wisdom is much more difficult than actually knowing but not doing it. Beautifully written my friend, great minute poem, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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I just love your words of wisdom, Roy. Thank you so much for your review!
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Well done
Comment from w.j.debi
An excellent Minute Poem. You create great visuals with words. I like the tightrope as metaphor for daily life. Each step has to be carefully placed in order to keep in balance. The picture adds to the drama.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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An excellent Minute Poem. You create great visuals with words. I like the tightrope as metaphor for daily life. Each step has to be carefully placed in order to keep in balance. The picture adds to the drama.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from papa55mike
That's what I need to do, sway with the breeze except, I'd be the Coyote with the small sign of SPLAT at the bottom of the canyon. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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That's what I need to do, sway with the breeze except, I'd be the Coyote with the small sign of SPLAT at the bottom of the canyon. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, I laughed out loud reading your comment! Obnoxiously, might I add.
Thank you for the awesome review. <3
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Fine rhymes and sentiment here, inconsistent metre here and the writing prompt above says strict iambic metre, which is missing in this poem, I would check the rules, good luck, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Fine rhymes and sentiment here, inconsistent metre here and the writing prompt above says strict iambic metre, which is missing in this poem, I would check the rules, good luck, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly, I have since revised. I appreciate your feedback! :)
