Guided by Faith
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Comment from jmdg1954
Barbara,
I wouldn't change anything you're doing. This is a Christian based novel and I feel Emma fits the part.
When Seth found Emma out of gas at the creek, I thought to myself that this girl is real airhead. Which kind of tuned me out. Then you gave us the reason of the siphoned gas. Perfect turnabout!
Personally, I thought the very last line was out of place. Nothing previous in my mind would have caused her to say this about her parents (though it's true). Just an observation.
"I think so. {Since Mom and Dad open the shop early, they go to bed early."}
Keep up the good writing.
John
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Barbara,
I wouldn't change anything you're doing. This is a Christian based novel and I feel Emma fits the part.
When Seth found Emma out of gas at the creek, I thought to myself that this girl is real airhead. Which kind of tuned me out. Then you gave us the reason of the siphoned gas. Perfect turnabout!
Personally, I thought the very last line was out of place. Nothing previous in my mind would have caused her to say this about her parents (though it's true). Just an observation.
"I think so. {Since Mom and Dad open the shop early, they go to bed early."}
Keep up the good writing.
John
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I deleted the rest of the last line. I was afraid I'd need some explanation. Thank you for the help. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sanku
I am very glad of the way you portrayed Emma. The world is full of imperfect people and it is a relief to read about someone who is positive through and through and I know some women who are like Emma . Please do continue the way you intended...
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I am very glad of the way you portrayed Emma. The world is full of imperfect people and it is a relief to read about someone who is positive through and through and I know some women who are like Emma . Please do continue the way you intended...
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Wendy G
Enjoyable chapter. I think there are plenty of young women who do a lot of things like Emma, she is just one of those people who is very involved with life. Seth is very protective; I think that will be very necessary as the story unfolds. The older guy sounds creepy, as does emptying her petrol tank.
Just follow your own instincts re the story and the characters. You have a good feel for what many readers want.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Enjoyable chapter. I think there are plenty of young women who do a lot of things like Emma, she is just one of those people who is very involved with life. Seth is very protective; I think that will be very necessary as the story unfolds. The older guy sounds creepy, as does emptying her petrol tank.
Just follow your own instincts re the story and the characters. You have a good feel for what many readers want.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Paul McFarland
The story is coming along very nicely, Barb. Can't wait to fond out who owns the Crown Vic. Something you might want to change. For a canoe, you use paddles - not oars.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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The story is coming along very nicely, Barb. Can't wait to fond out who owns the Crown Vic. Something you might want to change. For a canoe, you use paddles - not oars.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I will change that. Does one use oars on kayaks? My husband calls them oars, that's why I did it. Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
You are doing a great job with your story. Character development is going fine. I'm glad Emma ran out of gas because someone deliberately drained her tank, and not because she's just a ditzy female. There's a lot of intrigue with the possibility of Emma being stalked. The creepy older guy sounds like a good suspect. Per your note, I find Emma to be a person who truly enjoys being involved in all those things. I believe she is having fun. My great niece is in her freshman year of college. She plays soccer, made the dean's list, and works parttime in the library. Some people, like her, are just naturally doers. judi
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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You are doing a great job with your story. Character development is going fine. I'm glad Emma ran out of gas because someone deliberately drained her tank, and not because she's just a ditzy female. There's a lot of intrigue with the possibility of Emma being stalked. The creepy older guy sounds like a good suspect. Per your note, I find Emma to be a person who truly enjoys being involved in all those things. I believe she is having fun. My great niece is in her freshman year of college. She plays soccer, made the dean's list, and works parttime in the library. Some people, like her, are just naturally doers. judi
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and the support.
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You're welcome. I think you're on the right track with Emma. judi
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I thought the dialogue in this was extremely believable. I am no good at fishing myself, so it sounds like Emma is well-rounded with fishing experience. I did a double major at college the first time and graduated in three years, too, so I know it's possible. This is clean enough to be Christian fiction, or just regular fiction, so don't pay attention to naysayers. Only two little fixes:
At the creeks' edge,
I would say: At the creek's edge,
Unless, of course, you had two creeks joining there.
Also, I think this was an abbreviation, here: I think he went to UT."
I wonder if you mean: I think he went to Utah."
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I thought the dialogue in this was extremely believable. I am no good at fishing myself, so it sounds like Emma is well-rounded with fishing experience. I did a double major at college the first time and graduated in three years, too, so I know it's possible. This is clean enough to be Christian fiction, or just regular fiction, so don't pay attention to naysayers. Only two little fixes:
At the creeks' edge,
I would say: At the creek's edge,
Unless, of course, you had two creeks joining there.
Also, I think this was an abbreviation, here: I think he went to UT."
I wonder if you mean: I think he went to Utah."
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I have made the changes and it is UT for University of Texas. Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the help.
Comment from GWHARGIS
If I'm the one who said she was too perfect, it was because I couldn't get a full picture of her. I have gotten a much clearer picture of her. I do see her as a bit of an airhead. I like how she playfully call Seth out for his demeanor. I think he is drawn to her purity. Being a cop he probably sees more of the dark side of human nature. Gretchen
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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If I'm the one who said she was too perfect, it was because I couldn't get a full picture of her. I have gotten a much clearer picture of her. I do see her as a bit of an airhead. I like how she playfully call Seth out for his demeanor. I think he is drawn to her purity. Being a cop he probably sees more of the dark side of human nature. Gretchen
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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You are not the person in question. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
They say once a saint always a saint. In other words, saint is another word for a Christian, a true believer in the Lord Jesus Christ. It is a clear biblical truth that all are born in sin and all have a sin nature. Emma is rightfully a good woman who doesn't like problems. Love the character.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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They say once a saint always a saint. In other words, saint is another word for a Christian, a true believer in the Lord Jesus Christ. It is a clear biblical truth that all are born in sin and all have a sin nature. Emma is rightfully a good woman who doesn't like problems. Love the character.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the support and kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Barbara, thank you for sharing your information in your author notes. You are very kind and exceptional lady. I can tell you based your heroine Emma on your own life...more or less. I can see how some reviewers may think Emma is perfect. :)
Seth and Emma are a wholesome couple. You don't see that every day but that's because life is different now. I think Seth treats Emma like a little girl. I wish I had a man like that but on the other hand, I think women are more independent now.
I enjoyed reading this chapter. I wonder who is following Emma.
Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Hello, Barbara, thank you for sharing your information in your author notes. You are very kind and exceptional lady. I can tell you based your heroine Emma on your own life...more or less. I can see how some reviewers may think Emma is perfect. :)
Seth and Emma are a wholesome couple. You don't see that every day but that's because life is different now. I think Seth treats Emma like a little girl. I wish I had a man like that but on the other hand, I think women are more independent now.
I enjoyed reading this chapter. I wonder who is following Emma.
Well done!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Seth will do some learning here too. He has a younger sister he took care of, about Emma's age. He needs to realize Emma is an adult. He does. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Very interesting story. I am glad you had an interesting life working in the Lord's army. It is amazing how He uses us. I see nothing wrong with story.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Very interesting story. I am glad you had an interesting life working in the Lord's army. It is amazing how He uses us. I see nothing wrong with story.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
