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First Poems

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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Could you lighten up the print on your poem? It is very difficult to read or perhaps use another font size. It was in the contest; I wish I would have noticed it earlier. Did anyone give you a clue as to the darkness of the print?

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
    No actually they didn't I'll go ahead and write it up right now. Thank you so much for the tip well. Thank you for your review too and having a read. I appreciate it. Hope you have a great night thanks again!

    Okay I just changed it hopefully it's better
Comment from Regina Elliott
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This is quite an imagery rich
poem, Lea. The artwork
helps even more. I love
nature poetry and this one
delivers. I hope you have a
creative and inspirational
week. :))))


 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
    Thank you so much for Gina. I'm glad you liked it and for your time. I appreciate it too and hand I'm so glad that it resonates with people. You have yourself a great and wonderful day!
Comment from karenina
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Great image. Powerful refrain... "tides of copper" is a unique description that appeals!

Perhaps collide risin' --(with the apostrophe to indicate the dropped "g" would be helpful?

Just a slight suggestion...

In line ten, "they'll" be no retreat doesn't seem to be correct...

(there'll...maybe?)


Karenina



 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
    Thank you that's awesome I love your suggestions very well. I shall use them thank you so much for reading and reviewing as usual. I appreciate you and all your suggestions thank you again hope you're having a good night!
reply by karenina on 20-Mar-2023
    Oh good! Hope you found them helpful! Anytime I get some time to read and review is "great!"
Comment from Spitfire
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I'm guessing the speaker is the sand bar (personification) and it is happy about the crabs that shine before the tide comes in. The setting sun casts a copper color on the tide.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    You're very intuitive... I come to expect that of great poets like yourself!
    Thank you for reviewing my phone and for your comments and for your rating. I am very much appreciative hope you have a great day!
Comment from pome lover
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That is a lovely poem, and beautiful picture.
I wish, though, that the writing was in a lighter font as the very dark seemed, to me, to be sort of fuzzy and a bit difficult to read.
But still a very nice Kyrielle poem.
Katharine

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    Thank you so much I shall try and change the font color and see how it looks. Thanks for your time and for your kind comments and for your review. I would very much appreciated I hope you have a great day!
reply by pome lover on 19-Mar-2023
    thank you. You, too!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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An ambient write and this photograph is magical and I expect this has inspired you to write this colourful poem with matching rhymes, a pleasure to read, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    Thank you Dolly. ..I'm happy you like it! As always I'm ever appreciative your reviews and your comments they have been and continue to be so helpful to me thank. You? Again have an awesome day!
Comment from Wendy G
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I enjoyed your poem, as it was interesting and different - but I found it hard to read with the heavy black font against purple. I would suggest making the font white, or else adding a space between lines for reviewers' ease - but of course, your choice. Best wishes for the Kyrielle contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    Thank you Wendy so much for having a peak at my phone and offering your comments and your suggestions is always appreciated here. Thank you again I will do something with that font have a great day!
Comment from BermyBye50
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This is an excellent entry in the Kyrielle poetry contest. Each stanza paints a perfect picture matching the imagery of the artwork accompanying the poem. Your words capture the majesty of a spectacular moon setting casting its reflection upon the shore. Well done.

All the best in the contest,

Eugene

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your kind words. Thank you so much for taking the time to do a review for me and for this poem. I am most grateful I hope you have a great evening!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your kind words. Thank you so much for taking the time to do a review for me and for this poem. I am most grateful I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from kahpot
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How beautiful, waiting for return is difficult, if I had to ask one thing it would be to make the font more readable, it seems blurry against the background, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    Thank you. I think I'll turn it off a little bit and see how it looks. Thank you very much for your review and for taking the time to look at it as usual. I am always appreciative and I hope you have an awesome evening!!