If Things Were Still Run by Bob
Another attempt at a fun poem.7 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I had to down grade this to a four because the color font chosen made it unreadable to me and maybe others. What I was able to read was a good tribute to a legendary political leader, if I could have read it more easily would have rated it higher.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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I had to down grade this to a four because the color font chosen made it unreadable to me and maybe others. What I was able to read was a good tribute to a legendary political leader, if I could have read it more easily would have rated it higher.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Apologies for the colour choices. My wife agrees with you, she says I've always been colour unco-ordinated. Sorry about that.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Interesting take on history, chickens laying eggs, but it would have been better with a larger font. At my age anything less than size 22 is daunting, but for you I did, and learnt a new word -chook. Egg laying biddies.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Interesting take on history, chickens laying eggs, but it would have been better with a larger font. At my age anything less than size 22 is daunting, but for you I did, and learnt a new word -chook. Egg laying biddies.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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As a kid around sixty years ago we lived on a poultry farm. And we had one particularly nasty rooster. Best fun my twin and I had an egg fight. We destroyed around twelve dozen eggs and had great fun. My dad wasn't laughing, he found a leather belt and tanned our backside. That stopped our laughing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile here Bob, love the idea of a chook union! Ha ha ha, these chickens work hard to produce eggs for us and they seem under appreciated! What a lot of fun this poem is. Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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You made me smile here Bob, love the idea of a chook union! Ha ha ha, these chickens work hard to produce eggs for us and they seem under appreciated! What a lot of fun this poem is. Love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Glad to know my stupidity appealed to you. Thank you for all those stars.
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Glad to know my stupidity appealed to you. Thank you for all those stars.
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I call this entertainment, not stupidity Bob, ha ha ha x x x
Comment from JT traveller
I absolutely love this. Remember Hawkey in 1983 after we won the America's Cup? I asked my Mum if I still had to go to school. She said yes, 2/3rds of the other children in my class failed to show up.
On a more serious note, I have not been in Australia for some time now, are there really only 10 eggs per carton? I'll be home in a week or so. If so, that bis disgraceful.
A few suggestions if I may.
1. A question mark after "Would you like to be caged up all day?"
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2. The red background makes the poems hilarious and poignant words hard to read, perhaps a lighter shade?
A great write. I found it well composed and highly amusing.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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I absolutely love this. Remember Hawkey in 1983 after we won the America's Cup? I asked my Mum if I still had to go to school. She said yes, 2/3rds of the other children in my class failed to show up.
On a more serious note, I have not been in Australia for some time now, are there really only 10 eggs per carton? I'll be home in a week or so. If so, that bis disgraceful.
A few suggestions if I may.
1. A question mark after "Would you like to be caged up all day?"
And,
2. The red background makes the poems hilarious and poignant words hard to read, perhaps a lighter shade?
A great write. I found it well composed and highly amusing.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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I've corrected the question mark. Glad you sensed my intent, it was written as a piece of nonsense. Sorry about the size of print and colour scheme. Thank you for the review.
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Haha, and now look at the grammatical errors I made in my review. Profound apologies. I still think Bob Hawke was our best PM ever and I still want to know if there really are ten eggs to a carton, or, are you just pulling my leg? 😉
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No. But this image reminded me of an egg carton, but it only contained ten. That prompted my poem.
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Haha. I read you poem to my husband and he said, "You're joking right?(about the eggs) and I said ,"No, this is what Bob said", we both believed you. Thanks for the poem and the laughs Bob. J. 😂😂😂
Comment from BermyBye50
Bob,
This is a well-written rhyming poem with humorous overtones of m that at first seems culturally significant only to Australians. But upon a second look it also is a commentary on inflationary greed in the marketplace and the tendency to exploit those who can be economically taken advantage of around the world in a free market system. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Bob,
This is a well-written rhyming poem with humorous overtones of m that at first seems culturally significant only to Australians. But upon a second look it also is a commentary on inflationary greed in the marketplace and the tendency to exploit those who can be economically taken advantage of around the world in a free market system. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Eugene. I really appreciate your stopping by and offering an opinion on my writing. Having not heard from you before, I welcome you to fanstory
Comment from kahpot
it is a bloody shame I bought half a carton and got five, not even a spare space in the carton, you know to sneak in another one, I remember Bob, he liked a beer as well, very well written an excellent read****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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it is a bloody shame I bought half a carton and got five, not even a spare space in the carton, you know to sneak in another one, I remember Bob, he liked a beer as well, very well written an excellent read****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you Kahpot. Thanks for the review. I think very few of us will forget the Hawkie. Union members owed so much to his efforts in arguing for better working conditions.
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
Egg prices have skyrocketed here in the States, too. It's ridiculous, and many are blaming the restrictions that animal rights groups are forcing on farmers.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Egg prices have skyrocketed here in the States, too. It's ridiculous, and many are blaming the restrictions that animal rights groups are forcing on farmers.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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What a great name? What is your background? Thank you so much for stopping by and reviewing my poem.
