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A Poetic Pause

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First Poems

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Comment from Jasmine Girl
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Haha. The word "wrong" is perfect here. It rhymes with "song" and "along". Not sure the word "waived" is correctly used here.
Definition for Waive: refrain from insisting on or using (a right or claim):
example: "he will waive all rights to the money"

What do you think?

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Gatcha that's actually very good thank you so much for your suggestion very helpful and thanks for your review too. I really appreciate it hope you have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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You might want to put the speak inside inverted commas, as this will define and make the speach stand out Lea.

An interesting write Lea.

Just a small edit here:

Nothin, said Dad, (they) only just waived.

Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Thank you Dolly I'll go with that. I would appreciate your comments and thank you for your review Hope you are well!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Thank you Dolly I'll go with that. I would appreciate your comments and thank you for your review Hope you are well!
Comment from JT traveller
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Beautiful photograph to complement your words. A cheeky ditty with a double entendre. I enjoyed it. The colour palette and font size I loved. Jacqueline

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Thank you I'm so glad you liked it yeah. I want to do some of the light hearted. You? Know something funky so thank. You? For your time and for reading my phone and offering your comments as usual. I'm always appreciative have a great night!
reply by JT traveller on 18-Mar-2023
    Having a little respite in the hotel from the 32 degrees Celsius afternoon heat. Do you ever sleep? Lol
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    No. I'm a bit of a nightmare really and then I see it for a couple hours then I'm off doing more stuff. There are once in a while I pack it in and sleep a good eight hours.
reply by JT traveller on 18-Mar-2023
    I hope you have a restful evening tonight. J 😊
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Thank you you too!